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کلاس آنلاین پیش آیلتس فشرده مهرماه 1403
دعوت از تمامی عزیزان سختکوش برای شرکت در کلاس پیش آیلتس مهندس ابوالقاسمی برای روزهای شنبه و 3 شنبه ساعت 6.30 تا 8 عصر در مهرماه 1403
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✍️ این دوره از سطح نمره 4 آیلتس (کاملا پایه) آغاز شده و سطح شما رو تا حدود نمره 5 تا 5.5 آیلتس افزایش خواهد داد تا امکان یک استارت پرقدرت در دوره‌های آیلتس را به دست آورید. برای این منظور لطفا تعیین سطح را انجام داده و نتیجه را برای مشاور ارسال کنید.
✅ این کلاس آنلاین ویدیویی در اسکایپ هست و هر 4 مهارت آیلتس (رایتینگ، اسپیکینگ، ریدینگ و لیسنینگ) لغت و گرامر را شامل خواهد شد.
✅ تمامی تکالیف در همین صفحه از سایت و همچنین در تلگرام در تایم خارج از کلاس تصحیح می شود.
✅ منابع و آموزش های گزینش شده مدرس گلچینی از کتاب های کمبریج و آکسفورد هستند.
📝 این دوره شامل دست کم 8 تصحیح رایتینگ کاملا منطبق با فرمت رایتینگ های آیلتس و فیدبک بر روی 60 فایل صوتی ارسالی بخش اسپیکینگ می‌باشد.
📆 این کلاس به مدت 2 ماه برابر 16 جلسه 1.5 ساعته ادامه خواهد داشت.
👨🏻🏫 مدرس این دوره مهندس ابوالقاسمی با نمره 8 آیلتس آکادمیک و بیش از 15 هزار ساعت تجربه تدریس هستند. (بررسی رزومه و مدارک استاد و نمونه تدریس)
⌛️ آغاز دوره شنبه 7 مهرماه هست.
👈 برای ثبت نام با شماره زیر یا با این لینک در تلگرام در تماس باشید (درگاه متاسفانه هنوز فعال نیست)
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In adulthood people are happier because they are independent. Most individuals have argument with their parents before adulthood because parents control and limit every thing about their children. But in adulthood, they aren’t under control of their parents as before and can make decision and choose their life style in their own. For instance, In my country many parents don’t allowed their children to wear every clothes they want, watch every movie, go everywhere or have relationships with everyone and generally they are strict with their children. But after teenage years, individuals can do and follow what they want and these limitation no longer exist so, independence makes them extremely happy.(111 words)
Teenagers have happier life because there are more cheerful moments in their lives. Some experiences and moments never happen in adulthood or adults don’t have excitement or enthusiasm as much as children have. They are happy times such as when they buy new clothes, get a bicycle, fall in love, go to an amusement park, or something similar. For instance in my country, During Nowruz which is the Persian new year, children are in holiday for thirteen days. They wear new clothes, take money as gift, stay up late for watching their favorite programs, hang out with friends and so on. They are really happy for these enjoyable moments.(109 words)
Getting to a high position in a company is more achievable when you stay for a long time. Over the years, alongside improving skills, you will learn more about every aspect of the company including workflow, structure, mindset, mission and vision, strengths and weaknesses and etc. So, with this knowledge about the company, senior management can rely on you for a higher position. For instance, I know stories about my software developer friends who started their career in low positions in big companies in Iran like Digikala or Alibaba and they could achieve to high positions after several years with an emphasize on staying for a long period in a company as a necessity. (114 words)
People can improve their skills by working in different companies. Some companies operate in similar fields but at different levels that required individuals to enhance their expertise. Also, some companies work in various fields with different culture, responsibilities, tools and technologies. Therefore, to adjusting to the company and acting well, people have to improve their soft and hard skills. For example, in software developing area, there are many programming language, software tools and technologies that some companies use wide range of them in both back-end and front-end side, that to hire in these companies, developers should improve their hard skills. Also, nowadays, most of companies emphasize soft skills like time management, self-motivation and so on. (115 words
learn more about every aspect of the company including workflow, structure, mindset, mission and vision, strengths and weaknesses and etc. این سبک نوشتن اشتباه هست و نمره ای نداره چون شما دارید کلی صحبت میکنید و هیچ توضیحی برای هیچکدوم از موارد ارایه نشده. در عمل یک فهرست ارایه شده بدون ارتباط با بخش های قبل و بعد. موردی که در اول نوشته شده باید گام به گام توضیح داده بشه و توضیح پیش بره. اصلا درباره موارد دیگه نباید صحبت کنید.
قبلا گفتیم به هیچ عنوا مثال نباید زیاد شخصی باشه. باید از کشور خودتون یک مثال کلی تر بنویسید.
مثال جمله دوم بیش از اندازه کلی هست و ربطی به کشور شما نداره و فقط مثل بقیه توضیحات کلی داره موضوع رو بحث میکنه.
این موارد رو در رایتینگ های بعدی حتما منظور کنید. سمپل جلسه اول رو با دقت ببینید.
Students can use the time better in online classes. Imagine people participate in classes physically, the classes are stablished at different times and there is gap between them and, also consider the allocated time for preparing, going and coming back from university. At all these times, people can do their personal works and have specific routine if they have online classes. For example, at the day which I hade online classes, the time of commuting and the gap between classes was saved to me about five hours and I could do many things such as studying, going to gym and working on my project.(104 words)
Existing a better educational environment is the most important props of traditional universities. Being in an atmosphere that many people like yourself are studying, discussing face to face and earning science together physically, gives you motivation and energy, against of being alone in home. Also different facilities like libraries and free internet and, presenting entertainment programs bring more performance. For instance, When I went to university, I used the library to review different books, study and, also I had a better concentration. We also discussed about new data and share our ideas together caused people to be updated. We have fun sometimes that gave us energy to continue education. (109 words)
earning science منبع شما برای این ساختار آیا دیکشنری لانگمن بوده؟ باید حتما در این دیکشنری وجود داشته باشه همه ساختارهایی که استفاده میکنیم.
in home. حرف اضافه رو چک کنید حتما
against of being alone in home. ترجمه فارسی و بی معنی هست. بدون چک کردن ساختارها وارد رایتینگ نکنید.
bring more performance. چنین ساختاری نداریم اصلا.
For instance, When I went to university, هر دو مثالی که زدید شخصی هست. در آیلتس چنین چیزی مورد قبول نیست باید کلی تر باشه.
discussed about ترجمه فارسی
❌ تمامی ساختارهایی که در رایتینگ شما وجود داره باید چک بشه. به صورت اطلاع عمومی و بدون چک کردن نباید بنویسید چون هیچ تاثیری در پیشرفت نداره.
فرمتی که نوشتید با چیزی که تدریس شده کمی متفاوت هست. برای رایتینگ های بعدی این فرمت قابل قبول نیست.
Some of people prefer to migrate to big cities and live in them. This action has many reason, one of these reason is job opportunities. There are lots of job opportunities in big cities. because in big cities the population is larg, so we need more job to meet the needs of people in a big city. For example in my country many people migrate from their cities to Tehran because they want to find a job and earn more money to have a better life. 88words
Also some people because of many reason prefer to live in a small town. One of these reason is air pollution. In small towns there is no air pollution because there are little factories in small towns and in small towns the population is small. Alsow air pollution has many harmful effect on human health such as: risk of heart attack, lung cancer, skin cancer and etc. Thus they migrate from a big city to a small town ,because they want to have a healthier life.
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many reasons باید باشه چون اسم جمع لازم هست.
etc. مخفف در رایتینگ ها اصلا ننویسید.
❌ حتما پاراگراف های رایتینگ های بعدی دست کم 100 و حداکثر 110 کلمه باشه.
در کل رایتینگ خوبی هست و ایراد بزرگی نداره
Living in big cities has several advantages. One of them is a strong cultural presence. In big cities, you can meet people from various cultures and learn a lot from them. Additionally, many factories are located in the vicinity of big cities, which helps you find jobs and earn a salary. Moreover, big cities have well-equipped hospitals with advanced medical facilities. There are also more fun activities in big cities, including numerous shopping centers and theaters. The biggest and most popular universities are located in big cities, providing excellent opportunities to improve your level of education.(108)
Small cities usually have better weather conditions. People in small cities often know each other and help one another. In small cities, you can relax and enjoy life. People who live in small cities often work with their hands, which helps them develop strong bodies and muscles. Living in small cities is less stressful, and you don’t have to deal with traffic. The nature in small cities is beautiful. But unfortunately a lot of young people immigrate to the big cities and it caused incresed the average of their age(106)
For example, a person living in Astara (a beautiful small city in my country) can enjoy the cool and clean weather and benefit from several hot springs in her city.(27)
رایتینگ شما در کل خوب هست اما برای آیلتس باید یک دلیل مشخص رو همون ابتدای پاراگراف بگید و بعد بدون وارد شدن به موضوع دیگه همون رو کامل توضیح بدید و بعد هم یک مثال از کشور خودتون درباره همون دلیل بنویسید.
اگر هدف شما آیلتس هست حتما برای رایتینگ های بعدی با این فرمت بنویسید. نمونه هم که در سایت درج شده و در کلاس صحبت کردیم.
✅ بعنوان رایتینگ اول کار خوب انجام شده
I think there are more job opportunities ad demand for human resource in big cities because these cities placed hundreds of thousand or even millions of people that need services, products, education, fun and etc. Also because of better facilities, migration to these cities are increasing every year, that is good an opening to making more money. For example, I can see every day, new buildings are being built in my city that except of necessary workers, more than one hundred careers and industries are involved including transportation, painting, carpentry, electronic and etc. So big cities are places for ambitious people.(101)
Small town are appropriate place for people care about peace and want to have a calmer life. Opposite of big cities which involve many issues like air pollution, crowded and noise, small towns have cleaner and healthier environment. Also, crime occurs less than big cities and totally there is less stress in these towns. For instance, Tehran as a capital city that placed more than ten million people, has the most air pollution in Iran and is one of the top ten in the world that cause the different illnesses. Besides, there is a heavy traffic all day long that waste the tıme.(103)
بعنوان رایتینگ اول خیلی خوب نوشته شده اما به موارد زیر برای رایتینگ های بعدی دقت کنید:
دیدگاه شخصی اصلا در این سوال درخواست نشده. دیدگاه 2 گروه از افراد هست که داره بررسی میشه.
فقط یک مورد رو میتونیم بنویسیم و باز کنیم. پس Also, crime occurs less اینجا که یک مورد دیگه رو نوشتید اشتباه هست و باید همون مورد قبلی ادامه پیدا کنه.
✅ برای رایتینگ های بعدی حتما دقت بفرمایید.
ممنون.حتما