کلاس های خصوصی آیلتس مهندس ابوالقاسمی

6 دیدگاه برای کلاس های خصوصی آیلتس مهندس ابوالقاسمی

1. 

   امتیاز 5 از 5

   آرام – جولای 19, 2024

   (Writing task 1)

   Two maps display the Porth Harbour in 2000 and its alterations at present time.

   Overall, the porth has changed significantly during this period in terms of being more accessible for passengers and also the addition of some recreational for the people in the southern parts.

   The northern parts of the porth have gone under some changes over this period. In the past, there was just single dock beside the public beach as well as  a shower toilets upper parts of the car park which is connected to the main road and a marina for using private yachts. Today, the extra dock has been added to place more passengers ferries and marina relocate with fishing boats in the southern parts.

   In the lower parts of the porth, there  is a dramatic destruction.The old disused castle has been demolished and relplaced with a new large hotel as well as a private beach. Besides, some extra facilities like cafes and shops were added next to the exsisting old-life boat in the suburb of the hotel. Furthermore, along the current marina, another shower toilets are added and also the second car park is linked to the main road and there is a smaller road that connects the hotel to the main road.(208)

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     مهندس ابوالقاسمی – جولای 20, 2024

     some recreational for یا باید اسم بعد از این صفت نوشته بشه یا recreational رو تغییر بدید به اسم

     the extra dock has been added اینجا باید مشخص کنید در کدوم سمت بوده.

     there is a dramatic destruction. این ساختار در رایتینگ تسک 1 و حتی در زبان انگلیسی رایج نیست.

     old-life boat خط نیره در جای نادرست وارد شده و ترکیب اشتباهی رو ساخته. دقت کنید.

     در کل از نظر فرمت کلی و انتخاب اطلاعات و گزارش اونها کار به خوبی انجام شده.

2. 

   امتیاز 5 از 5

   یاس – جولای 16, 2024

   Situation )Collocations)
   1.Employees need to assess their financial situation before starting their own business
   2.Youngsters should prioritize saving money in this uncertain economic situation
   3. In a crisis situation wether at work or at school effective cooperation is crucial.
   4. One of the reasons why adults feel happier is having a family that support eachother in difficult situation.
   5. Currently,peoples financial situation is not .good enough to save for the future

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     مهندس ابوالقاسمی – جولای 18, 2024

     wether اسپلینگ رو دقت کنید.

     crisis situation این ساختار رو باید در لانگمن چک کنید و معادل مناسب تر پیدا کنید.

     eachother دو کلمه هست نباید چسبیده بنویسید.

     Currently,peoples به هم چسبیده ننویسید و اس آپوستروف رو هم درست بگذارید.

     is not .good چرا وسط جمله نقطه داریم؟؟؟

     قبل از ارسال با دقت جمله ها رو بخونید و خطاها رو تصحیح کنید.

3. 

   امتیاز 5 از 5

   آرام – جولای 16, 2024

   Collocation

   1. The government due to the poor economy needs extensive modifications in various parts of the country.

   2. The use of new vaccines has reduced genetic modifications in most humans.

   3. A suitable educational method in schools creates appropriate behavior modification in teenagers.

   4. People who suffer from obesity have a essential need for lifestyle modification to live a healthy life.

   5. Employers should make considerable modifications in terms of providing facilities to create job satisfaction in workplaces.

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     مهندس ابوالقاسمی – جولای 18, 2024

     خوب هستند 🌸🌸🌸

4. 

   امتیاز 5 از 5

   آرام – جولای 13, 2024

   Collocation

   1. A large budget has been allocated for the construction of sports facilities in parks to encourage people to do more exercise.

   2. Children should be taught by their parents to save money and meet their needs with a monthly budget.

   3. People who live on a tight budget should avoid traveling during the holiday season if they can.

   4. The company faced many problems in the new project due to a limited budget.

   5. The government increased recently the total budget for the production of electric cars to reduce air pollution in large cities.

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     مهندس ابوالقاسمی – جولای 14, 2024

     خوب هستند آفرین. لطفا بقیه جمله سازی ها رو هم بفرست.

5. 

   امتیاز 5 از 5

   آرام – جولای 13, 2024

   It is believed that saving money is an essential decision for all walks of life especially for young generations. I agree with this approach as they can have a better plan to achieve their long-term goals and also it helps them to be well-prepared for unexpected financial needs in the future.

   One benefit of saving money, especially for youngsters is they can have certain plans to achieve their long-term goals in the future which cannot be earned without collecting their money. We know, young people have a strong desire to earn what they are willing to have in the future which is out of reach for older people. By keeping track of their expenses and putting aside their money regularly, they have this opportunity to purchase their favorite homes or cars run their businesses, and have a better view of the future. For example, one of my friends started her own successful business by saving her money for several years.

   As it is known to all, the future is unpredictable for humans and there might be financial emergencies for everyone so saving amount of money these days is a wise action. It allows young people to create a safe source for their future expenses to spend from. The more they save, the more peace of mind they have in those difficult situations. Because they are fully prepared for anything in life, they have a better solution to meet their financial needs. For instance, a colleague of mine had an accident last month so she was able to pay for the repair costs by saving money.

   In conclusion, in my opinion, saving money is a beneficial action for all individuals, especially younger ones. As it asists them in having an organized plan to earn their long-term goals, and besides, they are fully prepared for unforeseen financial situations in the future.(312)

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     مهندس ابوالقاسمی – جولای 16, 2024

     For example, one of my friends started her own successful business by saving her money for several years. مثالی که زدید با شیوه تدریس شده اصلا هماهنگی نداره

     For instance, a colleague of mine had an accident last month so she was able to pay for the repair costs by saving money. این مثال هم با شیوه تدریس شده هماهنگی نداره. مثال باید کلی تر از کشور خودتون و در تایید دقیق نکته بحث شده باشه

     بقیه موارد خوب هست

6. 

   امتیاز 5 از 5

   آرام – جولای 9, 2024

   The line graph indictes some data about a number of individuals who partake in specific social centre in city of Melbourne during 20 years .
   (From 2000- 2020)

   Overall, the Table tennis and Musical performance were two categories which have shown a dranatic increase.However, the other majors like film club and Martial arts remained constant .

   In a short glance, Musical performance and Table tennis experienced an increase in terms of participants. The number of participants in musical performance    rose to just under 20 from 2005 to 2020. Similarly , the Table tennis started with more than 15 members but after that it reached its peak about 55 members in 2020. In contrast, the total paticipants in Amature dramatics after a insignificant increase in 2005 alomst 25 members dropped considerably to under 10 people in last year .

   According to the graph, the number of members who participated in film club and Martial arts experienced a negligible increase during this period of time .However, the film club was the only major which had the most members in the first year. It was about 65 members in 2000 and then after a little decrease to 60 participants in 2010 rose to the same level. But Martial arts started with 35 people in the first year and after a slight growth about 40 members in 2010 it fell to the primarily level . (194)

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     مهندس ابوالقاسمی – جولای 9, 2024

     بهتره باشه over 20 years

     فاصله رو فراموش نکنید increase.However عدم رعایت علایم نقطه گذاری قطعا نمره شما رو کم میکنه

     اینجا این عبارت other majors بی معنی هست. باید category یا group بنویسید.

     محدود به ساختارهای موجود در سمپل ها بنویسید: In a short glance, این ساختار رایج نیست نباید استفاده بشه.

     این ساختار از نظر دستوری غلط هست after a insignificant increase in 2005 alomst 25 members dropped باید باشه after a insignificant increase in 2005, which was almost 25 members, dropped

     مشخص نیست چه سالی منظور هست: in last year .

     از ساختارهای آکادمیک تر استفاده کنید: a little decrease

     ❌ در کل تعداد خطاها زیاد هست. ویرایش بفرمایید دوباره بفرستید.