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Writing#close friend
people believe it’s better to have only a few close friends. Friendship plays a vital role in our lives. Close friends understand us deeply; they know our strengths, weaknesses, and personalities. You can talk and share feelings about everything, even the most private details of our lives. Because of the knowledge they have of us, they care about us, and if you are in bad situation you can be sure they honestly support you without any expectations.
On the other hand, some people argue that it is better to have many casual friends. Having many casual friends can be equally rewarding. First of all, if you have a problem that you need advice or help with, casual friendships offer a sense of community. You can be exposed to various ideas and experiences that can be useful, and you are not limited by them. Secondly, unlike close friends, casual friends have lower expectations and may not ask for big favors because the relationship is not very deep, and they don’t have too much responsibility of eachother.
پاراگراف های شما با 2 دلیل نوشته شده و مثال نداره اما جمله بندی ها خوب هست.
بازنویسی کنید و با فرمتی که در کلاس تدریس شده بنویسید. یک دلیل با توضیح 50 کلمه ای و یک مثال 540 کلمه ای
topic writing ——-close friends
When people have a few close friends, they have more times to see them. They can go home together once, twice, or more a week. So they probably know the feeling their friends every day. Also They can call together every day and speak about their daily routine and this conversation may continue more than hours. Also when they are going to party or vacation, they try to go together and have more time with each other. For example we have a few close friends from many years ago. However under conditions we’re far from each other, we try to see each other very soon. We are on social media and spend a lot of times on these applications with our close friends. We go to travel together at least once in a month.
twice or more times باید باشه
feelings of their friends
call together نداریم
مثال به نظر میرسه ربط زیادی به موضوع نداره
جمله هایی که در توضیح نوشتی هم گسسته هستند. 2 بار هم با also شروع شده. توضیح باید کاملا متمرکز روی یک مورد باشه و همون رو ادامه بده نه فهرستی از دلایل یا فهرستی از مثال ها.
Writing #many casual friends
On the one hand, some people believe, It is so fun to spend time with many casual friends because probably they have different interest and also they like different hobbies. They can talk about what they want to do in their free times and share their ideas. Therefore, they have wide variety of hobbies. So, friends can choose one of them between a lot of ideas. Thus friends can have happy times together. For example in my country, casual friends decide to take up different hobbies and go to special places. they go to climbing every weekend, they can travel together and may play video games, also play team sports and etc. Thus, they spend their free times together and probably, enjoy.(122 words)
خیلی خوبه آفرین
Collocation #information
1.Social media give us very useful information.
2.Some of information in the article is incorrect.
3.Newspapers give information that people need.
4.Google is the one of sources of information.
5.Some of books provide me several useful pieces of information.
خوب هستند آفرین
Study abroad
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On the one hand, Some people prefer to study in an university with excellent facilities in abroad.(15 words) because they believe top universities in abroad spend a lot of money on education, So students can have excellent research facilities and budget for their research also they can use better equipment and top professors in these universities So They may be gain highest possible score and they probably gain valuable certificate.(52 words) For example in my country some people that want to use especial facilities such as better libraries and better equipment and extensive research laboratories, emigrate and Also they probably can graduate from one of top universities in the world. (39 words)
Study in your country
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On the other hand, Some people prefer to study in their country for financial support from their parents.(18 words) because they live with their family in a house , also probably their parents help them and they don’t need pay extra costs for different things and they can save more money and because their costs reduce, they don’t have to go to work full time and they help them that spend more time on their study. (59 words) For example in my country people live with their family for a long time and high percentage of people support by their family until they marry. This way is economical for them and reduces the cost of study. living with family reduces some of their costs such as transport, food and rent, that maybe this is not possible in abroad.(60 words)
in abroad دقت کن این ساختار غلط هست. نباید in بنویسیم.
research also دقت کن اینجا جمله اول تموم شده و جمله دوم شروع شده. باید حتما نقطه بگذاریم.
need to pay باید باشه دو تا فعل پشت سر هم هست.
help them to spend باید باشه
people support by their family بی معنی هست.
در کل خوب هست برای این مرحله.
assignment of 7th season
writing topic -study abroad study in your country
Some people prefer to study in the country for their mother tongue(12 words). Because when they know the language that is taught in class, they can understand all lessons better. Also if they have a lecture or seminar they probably gain better grades because they have more experience in their mother tongue. It’s very important to be strong in writing and speaking in a foreign language to study abroad(55 words). For example in my country teaching a second language is very weak. So in childhood, people almost know one regular language. Maybe someone knows a local language too. But a few know an international language. Then it seems difficult to learn a new language in adulthood and study abroad(49 words).
On the other hand, some people believe that is better to study abroad for the main source of knowledge(19 words). all over the world, some countries focus on one or more sciences to be strong in it. So, they are probably the first countries to achieve new knowledge and find ways to develop it. Then people can emigrate to different countries and study there to provide better sources and information to be a professional in science(56 words). For example in my country people decide to emigrate as a student abroad. Here, we have many problems get new technology and knowledge from other countries will result in government rules. So people prefer to study abroad and teach from an international professor and grow up in the main source of knowledge(52 words).
it is باید باشه نه its خیلی با هم فرق دارن دقت کن
teaching is very week بی معنی و ترجمه فارسی هست. منبع شما چی بوده؟
for the main source of knowledge دیگه چیه؟
other countries will result in این جا به نظر میرسه جمله ناقص هست و بخشی ازش حذف شده.
میتونیم بگیم and this results in…..
فرمت رایتینگ خوب هست اما از نظر جمله سازی باید روش کار کنی.
Writing Topic – Making a Decision Alone or with others
#making decision with others
Some people believe that making a decision with others is better(11 words), because they probably gain valuable experience in during their life. They can share their experience and their good ideas to make decision with others. People may have many experience and ideas about different fields that may be useful for making an important decision and this can help avoid our mistakes(50 words). For example in my country when people want to decide about their important apartment’s issues, neighbors gathering together and discus about different ideas. After share their brainstorm ideas, they can make decision that it’s probably correct and is useful for them.(42 word).
in during their life این ساختاری غلط هست باید باشه during their life
neighbors gathering این چه زمانی هست؟ اگر با when نوشتید باید ساختار رو طبق همون الگو بنویسید که میشه مثل جمله های شرطی
After share اینجا فعل باید با ing باشه. خطاهای رایج شماره 2 رو بییند. توی کلاس هم این رو کار کردیم.
فرمت ر ایتینگ خوب هست اما در کل باید تمرکز بیشتری به داشتن منع مشخص برای تک تک جمله ها داشته باشید و اصلا از خودتون به هیچ عنوان چیزی ننویسید.
ساختارهایی که شک داشتید رو اول چک کنید و بعد همینجا بپرسید.
assignment of 4th season
Writing Topic – Making a Decision Alone or with others
Some people prefer to Make a decision alone and they believe it’s maybe favorable(14 words). When each person decides to do many things by self-ideas, it probably has a more attractive result. If people succeed by themselves ideas, they achieve the goal, and if miss an opportunity they gain experience. But evermore they like results and it’s favorable for them because this is a way will result in their make decision on their own(59 words). For example in my country, students have to choose an academic field to enter university. They can make decisions independently according to their style and self-mind. So it’s favorable for them to study and graduate by make decision alone(39 words).
self-ideas چنین چیزی اصلا نداریم منبع شما چی بوده؟
themselves ideas این مورد هم همینطور بی معنی هست.
will result in their make decision on their own این ساختار هم بی معنی هست.
❌ لطفا بازنویسی کنید و ساختاری خارج از دیکشنری داخل رایتینگ شما وجود نداشته باشه. بسیار ساده بنویسید اما حتما جمله ها منبع داشته باشند.
Assignment of the third session
. Some people prefer to live in a big city. Others think it is better to live in a small town.
Both big cities and small towns have their advantages and disadvantages. Big cities offer a wide range of facilities and services, such as various restaurants, shopping options, entertainment, and many good hospitals or healthcare facilities. Additionally, there are numerous large companies that are often limited in small towns. For example, as an electrical engineer, I find it difficult to secure a good job or make acceptable progress in a small town. This is a significant reason for my preference for living in a big city.
On the other hand, some people prefer to live in small cities because of the cleaner air. In small cities, the number of cars and factories is lower, resulting in cleaner air. Every time my father travels from Sanandaj to Tehran, he experiences breathing problems because the pollution in a big city like Tehran is very high, but he But he doesn’t have this problem in a small city like Sanandaj
پاراگراف ها باید 100 کلمه باشند. شماره رو آخر پاراگراف بنویسید.
پاراگراف اول با شیوه ما هماهنگ نیست. سمپل رو ببینید. در رایتینگ های بعدی رعایت کنید.
1-Dr pezeshkian has become presedent to provide a service for Iranian people.
2- I believe preschools should provide chances for kids to learn a mind games.
3- in iran most of services in border citys cannot be provided.
4-chat gpt provide information and can be used easily.
5-providing education in usa is much better than iran.
presedent اسلپینگ رو خیلی دقت کنید.
a mind games جمع هست یا مفرد؟
chat gpt provide مفرد هست چرا اس سوم شخص رو نداره؟
تک تک جمله ها خطاهای ریز دارند. قبل از ارسال حتما باید با دقت چک کنید.
Some people prefer to live in a big city. Others think it is better to live in a small town.
Both of them have some advantages and disadvantages. I prefer to live in big cities because, for me and my field of study, I can’t have a good job or make acceptable progress in a small town. This is a good reason for me to prefer living in a big city.
Big cities offer a lot of facilities and services, such as various restaurants, shopping, entertainment , and many good hospitals or healthcare facilities, which are very limited in small towns.
Additionally, in a small town, most people know you. Most of them are your friends, family, or relatives, and I don’t feel comfortable with that.
On the other hand, big cities have air pollution, and the cost of living is higher than in small towns, but still, my choice is big cities
ممنون برای شروع خوب هست اما باید با توجه به تدریس جلسه اول محتوا و فرمت پاراگراف ها رو آپدیت کنید و برای جلسات بعدی با فرمتی که گفته شده بنویسید.
هر پاراگراف 100 کلمه که شامل دلیل و توضیحش و یک مثال و توضیحش هست.
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Assignments of the first session
:writings
big city reason
1-experience doctor
2-access to many things faster and better
3-better features
4-jobs apportituney
4-high level cultures
………….
when you are living in the big city you are access to axperience doctor because the doctor tend to live in big city for reasons accsee to any things including best education for ther children and and growing in high level of culture and learning them dance fitness music stady and anather thing that can be growing creativity
and the faindin talent although i think that it can not limiio to medical community and everyone that impotrand future’s and think them prefer to living a big city but is more between doctors.
so i think based on experiment that you access better treatment you must find it in big city and big country although beset traetment dependnt to bset paraclinical and not limited beset doctors and is the defect refer to government that can not divided justly helth per capita in the country
1-fixed income is reason to keep calm
2-average income in the iran is very low
3-people in the word try to increased incom
reading:
1-roset chickens
2-nervous and sad
3-parents
4-ping &pong
5-forest
6-at home
listening:
1-lEO/BUUCAHEI
2-37 BLUMENJASSE
3-431211057
4-1st
5-9dayes
6-400
7-chicken
8-sea
9-quiet
10-parking
زحمت بکشید هرتکلیف در یک کامنت باشه
شماره جلسه رو هم بنویسید
و اینکه جمله ها 100% هماهنگ با سمپل های دیکشنری باشه و جمله های رایتینگ هم حتما چک شده باشه از اطلاعات عمومی خودتون نباید بنویسید.
برای رایتینگ از نظر فرمت 100% هماهنگ با فرمتی که گفتیم. تعداد کلمات هم آخر پاراگراف نوشته بشه