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دعوت از زبان آموزان سختکوش برای شرکت در دوره نیمه خصوصی آیلتس شهریورماه 1403 مهندس ابوالقاسمی
🔴 کلاس 6 نفره آیلتس مردادماه 1403 برای روزهای شنبه و 3 شنبه ساعت 8 تا 9.30 شب رو در حال ثبت نام هستیم.
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✍️ این دوره از سطح نمره 5.5 تا 6 آیلتس شروع میشه و شما رو تا سطح 6.5 تا 7.5 آیلتس میرسونه. اگر به تازگی در دوره یا آزمونی شرکت نداشتید با لینک تعیین سطح میتونید سطح رو مشخص کنید و نتیجه رو برای پشتیبانی بفرستید.
✅ کلاس آنلاین ویدیویی در اسکایپ هست و هر 4 مهارت آیلتس (رایتینگ، اسپیکینگ، ریدینگ و لیسنینگ) لغت و گرامر رو شامل میشه.
✅ تمامی تکالیف در تلگرام و همین صفحه از سایت در تایم خارج از کلاس تصحیح میشه.
✅ حرفه ای ترین پشتیبانی رو در تلگرام و در ارتباط مستقیم و پیوسته با استاد دارید.
📝 دست کم 12 تصحیح کامل رایتینگ کاملا منطبق با فرمت رایتینگهای آیلتس و فیدبک بر روی صد فایل صوتی ارسالی بخش اسپیکینگ وجود داره.
🎯 اصول تمامی 4 مهارت آیلتس و صفر تا صد نکتهها به صورت دقیق در همین دوره کاور میشه.
📆 دوره به مدت 3 ماه در 24 جلسه 1.5 ساعته ادامه داره.
👨🏻🏫 مدرس این دوره مهندس ابوالقاسمی با نمره 8 آیلتس آکادمیک و بیش از 15 هزار ساعت تجربه تدریس هستند. (بررسی رزومه و مدارک) (نمونه تدریس)
🚀 آغاز این دوره روز شنبه 3 شهریورماه 1403 هست.
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Writing
The diagram illustrates eight steps which are essential to produce noodles from basic materials in manufactures by several machines.
The diagram shows the flour is transported from storage to mixer at the step one,then flour , water and oil are combined with mixer. At the step three, the mixed components which are called dough flatted by cylinder and formed to sheet; after the progress, the sheet is moved to cutting machine by conveyor belt. It is cut by striping machine into strips at the end of step four.
At step five, strips are formed to discs and moved to the next step, noodles are heated then fried by oil then the cups fill with cooked noodles, which are mixed with other ingredients such as vegetables and spices at the end of step seven. Finally, cups are packed and labeled to be store for distribution.
Overall, the diagram shows noodles production briefly in eight main steps which starting with transporting flour from storage and ending with packing and sealing products.(169 words)
materials in manufactures این چیه متوجه نشدم اصلا
flour , water به محل درج ویرگول دقت کن. سمپل رو ببین دقیق
fried by oil نه باید باشه fried in oil
توی کلاس هم تاکید کردیم که پاراگراف overview در این نوع سوال ها باید حتما main features رو اشاره کنه مثل انواع دیگه. فقط کافی نیست که بگیم این تعداد مراحل رو داره و اول و آخر چی هست
در کل قابل قبول هست اما با خوندن سمپل ها سعی کن جمله های متنوع تر و قوی تری داشته باشی.
writing
There are three pie charts in the figure that illustrate the average consumption of three nutrients: sodium, saturated fat, and sugar in each meal. The meals include breakfast, lunch, snacks, and dinner.
It seems lunch and breakfast do not exhibit significant changes compared to other meals. The average percentages of all three nutrients for breakfast remain consistently around 15%, which is the lowest level among the meals. Furthermore, the average percentages of sodium and saturated fat for lunch are around 26%.
The charts display the consumption of sodium and saturated fat for dinner contribute significantly more compared to other meals, that are approximately 40%,however, average percentages of these two nutrients are less than one-fourth for breakfast and snacks. Additionally, the consumption of added sugar compared to sodium and saturated fat increases significantly for snacks which is about 40%. However, the average percentages of added sugar in other meals are less than one-fourth.
Overall, the charts show the consumption of sodium and saturated fat for dinner contribute significantly more than other meals. Additionally, a similar trend is observed in the amount of added sugar consumed in snacks. (186 words)
lunch and breakfast do not exhibit significant changes دقت کنید اینجا بحث تغییر مطرح نیست همه در یک لحظه ثبت شده و تغییری در تایم وجود نداره. اینجا میتونیم مقایسه رو بر اساس بیشتر یا کمتر بودن نسبت به هم صحبت کنیم. سمپل رو دقیق ببینید.
remain consistently اینجا صفت میخوایم. حتما ساختارها رو چک کن قبل از وارد کردن در رایتینگ. اصلا نباید حالت اطلاعات عمومی یا سر جلسه امتحانی بنویسید.
remain consistently around 15%, حرف اضافه هم نوشته نشده. عدد ها باید با at باشه. سمپل رو دقیق ببینید.
Furthermore, the average percentages of sodium and saturated fat for lunch are around 26%. اینکه هیچ پردازشی روی اطلاعات نکنید و فقط همونطور که هست گزارش کنید نمره شما رو کم میکنه. ضمنا مشخص نیست آیا هر دو با هم این عدد هستند یا تک تک این عدد هستند. مورد آخر اینکه خوب این چه معنی ای داره که این عدد هستند؟ ارتباطش با بقیه موارد چیه؟ زیاده؟ کمه؟ نصف کل هست؟ خواننده هیچ تصویری نداره چرا این جمله توشته شده اصلا.
تعداد خیلی زیادی از حروف ربط استفاده کردید: however, Additionally, However, هر سه در یک پاراگراف. باید در هر پاراگراف یک یا نهایتا 2 تا حرف ربط داشته باشیم وگرنه حالت غیر طبیعی پیدا میکنه چون پاراگراف اونقدر صحبت نکرده که انقدر تضاد یا همسانی داشته باشه.
آخرین مورد اینکه در پاراگراف ها حالت کل به جزء که باید از main features به سمت جزییات باشه وجود نداره. اگر حتی با main features هم شروع شده اما ادامه توضیح درباره این موارد یا در پیوند با این موارد نیست. حتما سمپل رو از این نظر دقیق ببینید.
این موارد اگر رعایت نشه رایتینگ به سختی میتونه از نمره 6 بالاتر بره. اما پاراگراف و جمله بندی ها به طور کلی خوب هست.
Writing
Nowadays, the number of individuals who prefer to try other therapies instead of going to doctor for their health problems is increasing. It can be a positive development because it has low cost for people and some of the therapies have low side effects. (44 words)
Alternative therapies can have low side effects for people who choose to try other treatments instead of visiting their doctor. Most alternative therapies go back many years ago when people didn’t have knowledge about chemical drugs. In other words, these therapies come from natural sources, which have minimal long-term side effects due to the absence of chemical ingredients. For example, in my country, it is very common for people to use herbal medicine, which is sourced from nature. People many years ago tried the therapy for diseases, they had enough knowledge about the therapies which had been examined frequently for many years and showed low side effects. (107 words)
Most alternative medicines are low-cost, which encourages people to try these treatments instead of visiting their doctor. These therapies have been used for many years which have simple synthesis progress to provide substances. That allow people try it at minimal costs without using modern technology. This may explain why many people prefer to try these therapies. For example, in my country, people utilize Aboali Sina medicine methods for their health issues, that go back many years ago. It is easy to access for people because Aboali Sina used basic instruments for providing materials which can reduce the cost of therapy. (100 words)
In conclusion, some individuals try other therapies instead of going to usual doctor. In my opinion alternative medicine can be a positive development, there are two main reasons for that. First, most of alternative medicines have low cost. Second, these kind of therapies have low side effects. (47 words)
is sourced from nature. این رو تا حالا نشنیدم. حتما لانگمن چک کن
for many years which have simple synthesis این جمله معنای مشخصی نداره. الان جمله واره موصولی(which have simple synthesis) چه چیزی رو دقیقا داره توضیح میده؟
These therapies have been used for many years which have simple synthesis progress to provide substances. مشخص نیست ربط این جمله به مساله هزینه که دلیل اصلی پاراگراف هست چی هست دقیقا.
medicine methods چنین ترکیبی نداریم
access for people فارسی
ساختارهای بی معنی در سمپل رو باید خیلی دقت کنی و توضیحات رو مشخص تر و منسجم تر بنویسی. میتونی تاپیک رو بدی به هوش مصنوعی و جمله ها رو چک کنی. گرچه فرمت ممکنه فرق کنه اما جمله ها بدون شک قابل قبول و خوب هستند.
Dear sir………………… I am going to know about your course which will start less than two months. I means electrical design course in your college. can I still hope enroll it? I have sent you an email one month ago but you don’t have answered me yet. I think you maybe didn’t receive my email.
Also, I will know coast of this course and can I pay in installment. If I succeed to achieve this certificate will I have chance to use it in your city? In fact, are there any opportunities to get a well-paid job by this certificate? I heard this course is very practical and I hope hear from you because I don’t have much time and I have to decide as soon as.
Best regards
دقت بفرمایید رایتینگ شما باید حتما 3 پاراگراف باشه و دست کم 160 170 کلمه بنویسید.
اصلاح بفرمایید بفرستید.
Writing
The chart shows total duration of conversions in minute by telephone in the UK. It includes three categories: Local, National and International, and Mobiles from 1995 to 2002.
According to the chart, the local category had the longest total duration of conversions in 1999 which reached 90 minutes. The shortest total duration was less than 10 minutes and that belonged to the mobiles category in 1995. The duration of local calls increased steadily from 1995 to 1999 and decreased gradually from 2000 to 2002. Nevertheless, it remained at the highest level among all categories over this eight-year period.
The total duration of national and international call as well as the mobiles call increased from 1995 to 2002; however, the mobiles category had significant changes over this eight-year period. The longest total duration of mobiles call is more than 40 minutes in 2002 and the longest total duration of national and international call is almost 60 minutes.
Overall, the longest duration of conversation belongs to the local category each year. The national and international categories increased gradually from 1995 to 2002 while the mobiles category increased significantly at same period.(189 words)
خیلی از منابع میگن این ساختار نباید نوشته بشه According to the chart, این حذف کنید بقیه همونطوری درست هست.
the longest total duration of conversions پارافریز خوبی انجام نشده. به خصوص کلمه conversation معادل خوبی نیست. سمپل رو ببینید.
90 minutes. گزارش غلط هست چون billion باید باشه
is more than 40 minutes زمان باید یا همه گذشته باشه یا همه حال
پاراگراف Overall خوب نوشته نشده. باید به 2 مورد از همه بارز تر اشاره کنه. سمپل رو ببینید. صفت های عالی معمولا در این بخش لازم هستند.
[Agriculture like all kinds of sciences has developed and reached an advanced situation but global hunger remains one of the significant challenges in life. There are a variety of factors contributing to existing poverty in the world, but the most important aspect is
climate change. This issue affects food production both directly and indirectly. (54 words)
The changing weather events altered rainfall patterns and rising temperatures have led
to droughts nearly everywhere in the world. These problems impact the amount and quality of food produced. The reduced efficiency in crops leads to increased costs, which means global hunger is expanding significantly in our times. In addition climate change disrupts transportation infrastructure, damaging roads and ports which can disrupt food distribution systems. For instant, in Netherland all these weather events lead to rising sea levels, allowing saltwater to enter freshwater resources. These issues lead that farmer lose some soil and water for their activities. All of these effects make food more expensive and in some areas we face a lack of food. (115 words)
There is no single solution for eliminating the effects of climate change. Achieving
effective solution depends on various elements one of which requires them significant effort that can be complicated. We need to develop research about the reasons behind these weather events. Prioritizing these reasons is vital. Governments must invest in reducing climate change with political plans aimed at decreasing malnutrition while ensuring vulnerable people can access food more cheaply and easily. For instant, in the northwest of Iran agricultural knowledge must be transferred to vulnerable communities through technology transfer. Traditional methods of food production must change and be replaced with sustainable agricultural practices such as organic farming. Development of climate-resilient crops can also play a crucial role in ensuring food security. (123 words)
In conclusion, comprehensive global action is needed to reduce the effects of climate
change. All governments and nations should help preserve natural resources and prioritize improving their policies. In this way, sufficient food can be made accessible to everyone. (39 words)
Writing 11th Session
Nowadays, agriculture is developing around the world in many countries. However, There are a lot of people suffer from starvation. Economic issues in some countries can be a reason for the problem. Government should dedicate subsidy to improve the situation. (40 words)
Economic issues in some countries can be cause of starvation. The unequal distribution of wealth among people around the world lead to financial difficulties. There isn’t a balance between income and living expenses which can be a reason why some people are unable to afford their necessitates. For example, in my country, because of unequal distribution of wealth, some people often suffer starvation due to insufficient salary while others spend money on unnecessary expenses and luxuries. In other words, the unequal distribution of wealth is cause of the imbalance between income and living expenses which are relevant to starvation directly around the world.(103 words)
The government should dedicate subsidy to improve the cost of people starvation. Government should find a way how to balance the distribution of wealth between people, subsidy can be a solution for these situations. If government pay money for a portion of poor people’s living expenses, they can buy their necessitates such as food. For example, in my country, the government every month dedicate subsidies for food and other necessitates which reduce the cost of food products for poor people. Governments can decrease starvation significantly around the world by subsidy which allows them to keep a balance between people’s income and living expenses. (103 words)
In conclusion, economic issues can be a reason for why some people go hungry while agriculture develop around the world in many countries. One solution for the problem is government should
pay money as subsidy to make prices lower for poor people.(42 words)
The unequal distribution of wealth among people around the world lead to financial difficulties. هیچ توضیحی برای این مورد ارایه نشده. عینا خودش رو تکرار کردید.
The government should dedicate subsidy to improve the cost of people starvation توضیحات این مورد هم خیلی کلی و حالت فکت ارایه شده به صورتیکه اگر این کار انجام بشه به صورت معجزه آسا و بدون توضیح جزئیات خود به خود مشکل یکهو برطرف میشه. توضیح باید منطقی باشه و کامل تر ارایه بشه.
Governments can decrease starvation significantly around the world by subsidy which allows them to keep a balance between people’s income and living expenses. این مورد هیچ ربطی به کشور شما نداره و نباید نوشته بشه. ضمنا تکرار ادعای پاراگراف هست بدون توضیح درباره جزئیات. این شیوه به هیچ عنوان مورد تایید نیست.
❌ به نظر میرسه این رایتینگ بدون زمان کافی برای فکر کردن و بررسی نوشته شده و هدف فقط تمام کردن رایتینگ نه یادگیری و تمرین بوده. کیفیت این رایتینگ بسیار پایین هست. این سبک نوشتن کمکی به پیشرفت شما در این مهارت نمیکنه. لطفا به مواردی که مشخص شده و به آموزشی که از جلسات اول دادیم خیلی دقت کنید و برای نوشتن رایتینگ 3 4 ساعت زمان بگذارید.
Although there has been lots of improvements in agriculture, some people starve nowadays all over the world.climate change can be one of the reason in various part of the earth.it is effective to ulitize new tecnology and dedicate this sience with needful portion to sort out this issue.(50 words)
The climate and weather can make worse condition for growing crops in many area.plants and vegetations need proper environmental factors to thrive perfectly.in fact, both suitable weather,soil and adequate water have immense influence on agriculture for instant warmer temperature cuses to increase evaporation surface water therefore it result in drying soil,vegatation and plants which are a major food suply for human.besides,agriculture products are as essential nutrition for livestoc such as cow,hen and sheep that whatever they produce like milk,egg or meat are vital to servival humans.as a result drought,flood,lack of appropriate soil and water shortage have strongly effect on agriculture. (110)
There are many solutions to resolve these problem.to use modern tecnology can be highly helpful to decrease damages of the climate.also new data and sience should be donated poor country who do not access to this such tecnology for example they can use special smart sensors for watering that save water and keep soil moisture and it is conveninet to work. on the other hand, there are some tools to anticipate the weather so farmers take positive steps on farming.As many countries farme traditionally.thus they obviously need to get these advances.(95)
IN conclusion,regardless of professional agriculture in the world still many individuals do not have food.the importance of climate change is indisputable that sharing new data and and modern tools can be impressive.(34)
it is effective to ulitize new tecnology and dedicate this sience with needful portion to sort out this issue. معنی این جمله مشخص نیست و 3 خطای املایی دارد(sience /tecnology / ulitize ) در جمله دوم مقدمه باید سوال پرسیده شده پاسخ داده شود.
many area. در اینجا اسم باید حتما جمع باشد.
cuses to increase evaporation این ساختار فارسی و غیر قابل قبول هست. بجز اینکه cause هم اشتباه نوشته شده.
besides,agriculture products are as essential nutrition for livestoc such as cow,hen and sheep that whatever they produce like milk,egg or meat are vital to servival humans.as a result drought,flood,lack of appropriate soil and water shortage have strongly effect on agriculture. (110) پاراگراف 100 کلمه شما باید شامل 1 دلیل و توضیحات و 50 کلمه مثال از کشور شما درباره همان مورد باشه. هیچ مثالی نوشته نشده.
country who فقط برای افراد از who استفاده میشه.
access to این حرف اضافه اشتباه هست.
❌ تعداد خطاهای دستوری و اسپلینگ در این رایتینگ بسیار بالاست و باید یک ویرایش سنگین قبل از ارسال انجام بدید همیشه
❌ فرمت رایتینگ با چیزی که تدریس کردیم یکی نیست. برای افزایش شانس نمره مطلوب کوشش کنید کاملا هماهنگ بنویسید.
Global hunger
Recent years have witnessed tremendous developments in agricultural science yet every day people all over the world continue to suffer and even die from hunger. In my opinion, this is because rarely impact the developing world poor infrastructure of political about this case.
There is widely held perception in many parts of the world that ensuring the consequence of globalization lead to bring down the hunger. More often than now, struggling for not die of hunger thanks to the tendency toward globalization rather than the former, the root causes are left un tackled.
Despite the perseverance of future-gazers for establishing developing world, many alterations in global demographic trends which leads off prevelance of hunger and malnourishment have been ignored. Lacking adequate daily nutrition is the most factor for less developed societies, thought it is not a trivial issue for improved ones.
I am totally convinced that this much densely populated countries should seek substantial methods for conceivably crops fertility in order to be responsive to a fast-growing population.
The solution that I believe would be most effective is directing humanitarian funds previously focused on food aid towards education and agriculture instead of instability and conflict political.
In conclusion, developing companies face myriad problems that hinder their ability to take advantage of newer agricultural models and we we should direct more funding to helping these countries learn more about new farming methods.
جمله دوم مقدمه باید هر دو سوال رو جواب بده نه فقط یکی
lead to رو توی دیکشنری چک کن ساختارش رو دقیق ببین.
struggling for not die چنین ساختاری نداریم بدون چک کردن نباید بنویسی.
leads off prevelance of hunger بی معنی هست. به نظر ترجمه فارسی کردی.
most factor اینجا صفت باید داشته باشی.
پاراگراف بندی رو باید مشخص تر انجام بدید و تعداد کلمات هر پاراگراف رو بنویسید.
دقت کنید پاراگراف باید با دلیل شروع بشه و بعد توضیحات رو بنویسید. از نوشتن جمله های کلی بجای دلیل در ابتدای پاراگراف خودداری کنید چون نمره ای نداره و جای توضیحات مهم رو میگیره
IN spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people round the world still go hungry
Why is this the case?
What can be done..?
Although,there has been lots of improvement on agriculture some pepole starve nowadays all over the world.climate change can be one of the reasons in various part of the earth.it significant to utilize
new tecnology and to dedicate that with needful portion.
The climate and weather can make better or worse situations for growing crops.In fact,in some part of the world climate change has immense impact on agriculture for example warmer temperature can cuse to increase evaporatin therefore it result in drying surface water,soil and plant.besides ,changes in rainfall and water shortage affect agriculture products which are essential for livestoc nutrition because these productions are important food ،supply for some animals such as cow ،اpeople sheep and hen .thus,people not access some ingrediants such as meet,egg ,milk and so on.as a result drought,flood ,lack of suitable soil have strongly influence on agriculture.
As researches demonstrate many individual are invulnerable being hunger due to some problem in agriculture and weekness tecnology in some areas .It is proved that some countries just are farming traditionally they do not have approprite and modern tools and khowledge for consistent agricalture.It is vital governments put substantioal subsidy to invest in farming for instance to import effective and standard tools like special smart sensores for watering particularly in dought.on the other hand developed country have to donate modern tecnology to needful sites.
In coclusion , climate chang make some problem for agriculture that high_tec deviceses and sience may help resolve this issue finally each person has right would have proper food.
ممنون از شما اما پاراگراف بندی اصلا مشخص نیست باید حتما آپدیت بفرمایید و پاراگراف ها رو با تعداد کلمات مثل سمپل مشخص کنید.
ضمنا دقت کنید که در بازه مشخص شده باشه. یعنی پاراگراف های اصلی 100 تا 100 و مقدمه/نتیجه گیری هر کدوم 35 تا 50 کلمه
Your friend lives in another city where you are going to live in the future. Write a letter to him and in your letter:
* Ask for information about living there
* Specify your priorities for your request
Dear John
How are you my friend? I hope you enjoy living in Toronto. As you know, I’m going to move there next year, so I’m asking you to help me find a suitable place to live. Of course, I’ve researched this myself. But I want to share them with you so that you can express your opinion so that I can make a more correct decision. Considering the suitable schools in the north and west of Toronto, and on the other hand, my desired workplace, which is in the west, is the first priority in the west, but if you can’t find a suitable one, the north is not a bad choice. I dont know what nationalities live in these areas and what kind of culture do they have? You have lived there for many years, please guide me on the points I have mentioned. Hoping to have more dates there and have good days ahead.
Many thanks, Ali
❌ تعداد کل کلمات تمام رایتینگ ها باید نوشته بشه.
❌ رایتینگ شما پاراگراف بندی نداره. باید حتما در 3 پاراگراف مجزا نوشته بشه
so that you can express your opinion so that در این بخش کوچک دو بار so that استفاده کردید. از ساختارهای جایگزین استفاده کنید. سمپل ها رو با دقت ببینید.
make a more correct decision. چنین ساختاری نداریم. حتما عبارت ها رو چک کنید در دیکشنری و حالت اطلاعات عمومی یا ترجمه فارسی رایتینگ نویسی نکنید.
Considering the suitable schools in the north and west of Toronto, and on the other hand, my desired workplace, which is in the west, is the first priority in the west, but if you تعداد زیادی جمله به هم وصل شده و دنبال کردن موضوع غیر ممکن است. جمله ها رو بیش از از طولانی نکنید. دقیقا با استایل و اندازه ای که در سمپل ها میبینید باید جمله سازی کنید.
خطاهای زیادی در این رایتینگ وجود داشت که صحبت کردیم. حتما در رایتینگ های بعدی این موارد رو رعایت کنید چون در آیلتس نمیتونه به این شکل موفق باشه. ضمنا همراه با رایتینگ باید تمامی تکالیف دیگه هم ارسال بشه. تک مهارتی نمیتونید کار کنید. اگر فقط رایتینگ ارسال بشه بررسی هم به طور محدود هست. در عمل هم بدون انجام تکالیف دیگه شانسی برای بالا بردن سطح زبان ندارید. حتما به طور کامل ارسال بفرمایید.
Writing 9th session
Dear Mr. Jeff,
I am writing with regards to inform you that I was one of the trainees of computer programs course for last 6 months.
I have recently graduated from this course which I have learned totally the programs about interior designing by getting the best score. I want to give you this hope that these programs are extremely useful for promoting the efficiency of the company.
As stated in my resume, I have good work experience in the field of designing by fully passing this course I have cranked up my knowledge ,thus I can confidently be the best of myself.
Please let me know if you require any further information.
Yours sincerely
B.Najafi
❌ دقت کن نامه ها باید دست کم 150 کلمه باشند نامه شما خیلی کمتر از این این عدد هست. بازنویسی کن بفرست.
Writing 9th session
The figure presents two maps of an island, one map shows island before construction and the other ones shows after construction, which includes various facilities for tourists.
The map shows two accommodation areas, one is located in the center of the island and another one situated on the western part which connected to the beach with footpath. The swimming area is in the sea near to the beach which placed in the western part of the island. There are no building or facilities in the eastern side.
According to the map, the reception is surrounded by an accommodation area to the west and another to the east. A restaurant placed in the north of the reception and pier located in the south. People can access to restaurant and pier from the reception via vehicle track. There are two boats at the pier.
Overall, There are significant development in the central and western regions of the island which provide numerous facilities for tourists, such as swimming area, accommodations, and beach. However, the eastern part of the island has remained unchanged. (179 words)
can access to فارسی هست دقت کن
در کل عالیه اما یک مورد مطرح هست و اینکه این رایتینگ تمرکز زیادی روی گزارش جزء به جزء و تمرکز خیلی کمی روی پردازش و دسته بندی داره.
برای نمره 7 و بالاتر در رایتینگ نه فقط قدرت در گزارش جزء به جزء بلکه دسته بندی و گزارش آیتم ها با هم و دسته بندی و گزوه بندی اون ها هم خیلی مهم هست.
سعی کنید در گزارش اجزا رو در ارتباط بیشتری با هم توضیح بدید و تا حد ممکن یک دسته بندی در نوشتار وجود داشته باشه به خصوص اگر امکان چنین دسته بندی ای وجود داره. سمپل های بیشتر رو ببینید مشخص هست.
The individuals have always explained about activities without payment by students as a high school program. I absolutely agree with attitude because they have a chance to have valuable experience in the workplace also they improve their relationship with other colleagues and their manager.(44 words)
Basically, educational centers have a different environment from the conditions of business places, and when students do public works before entering the labor market, they gain very valuable experiences that cannot happen in the classroom, and this program can be one of the lessons considered very practical and vital. For example, in the country where I live, students are taken to institutions where they produce handicrafts such as pottery and sell them in a bazaar and donate the proceeds to charity centers. In fact, they experience production and sales at the same time and enjoy the useful work they have done.(101 words)
On the other hand, participating in good deeds and interacting with colleagues and the manager makes them improve their personal relationships and face different personalities in the workplace. The type of relationships and its rules in the work environment are very different from the school environment and students will be justified by more serious challenges. If we consider the previous example in my country, apart from the relationships in their participation and production, students should participate in the sale of products. and adapt to the different tastes and demands of customers. They must communicate effectively so that the product is sold and they reach their goal.(108 words)
In conclusion, when students do an activity outside of the regular school program, they gain many useful experiences and practical relationships, which can be one of the best curriculum.(29 words)
in the workplace also بین جمله ها باید نقطه باشه.
relationship with other colleagues برای دانش آموزان کلمه درستی نیست
gain very valuable experiences این مورد دلیل پاراگراف اصلی اول شماست. همون اول باید نوشته بشه و 50 کلمه توضیح بدید که چرا این حرف درسته و چه ربطی به سوال داره. شما کلی گویی زیادی کردید و بعد که دلیل رو مطرح کردید هیچ توضیحی ندادید که چطور ممکنه و چه ربطی به سوال داره(چطور مزیت هست) دقیقا.
مثال جمله دوم خیلی کلی هست بیشتر شبیه ادامه توضیحات هست تا یک مثال واقعی اما غلط نیست.
ایراد هایی که مربوط به طرح دلیل و توضیحاتش گفتیم حتما دقت کنید.
از نظر ساختارهای دستوری کار به خوبی انجام شده و خطاها کمتر هست.
Writing 7th session
Nowadays, some people prefer that students carry out unpaid community service projects as part of the high school curriculum. In my opinion, high school students can have valuable experiences by participating in these activities. In addition, it prepares them to take on responsibility in the future.(46 words)
Students can have valuable experiences through unpaid community service projects. These activities help high school students to learn more about social life which allows them to develop social skills. This is a valuable experience because it prepares students for the challenges of community spirit by enhancing their abilities. For example, in my country, some high schools ask students to carry out duties in charity. They believe these activities offer students to learn more about poor people’s life. It is significant because it teaches them that the world can become a better place when they give other people a helping hand. (100 words)
Unpaid community service projects prepare high school students to take on responsibility. These projects allow students to challenge themselves by assuming responsibility. They can gain practical experience by performing their duties which improves students’ sense of responsibility for the future. This activities offer them to improve their abilities which can have significant effect on their lives. For instance, in my country, some high schools ask students to participate in cleaning parks or beaches as unpaid community services projects which is as part of their curriculum. These responsibilities help students to find out nature has important role in people’s lives. Overall, these activities improve their sense of responsibility toward the environment. (110 words)
Unpaid community service این ترکیب بی معنی هست. اگر منبعی دارید که همین مورد توی اون نوشته شده بفرمایید.
دلایل و توضیحات به خوبی نوشته شده و مشکلی دیده نمیشه. روی زمان نوشتن هم حتما تمرین کنید.
Writing Introduction
Nowadays, some people prefer that students carry out unpaid community service projects as part of the high school curriculum. In my opinion, high school students can have valuable experiences by participating in these activities. In addition, it prepares them to take on responsibility in the future.
مشکل خاصی نداره.
رایتینگ ها یکجا باید ارسال بشن تیکه تیکه دیگه نیازی نیست بفرستید.
In today’s modern societies, some people believe that charity communities should be an obligatory part of student’s education. Although, I my self assume that it is not comparable with their basic education fields. More over, any compulsory education will cause opposite consequences.
Although, I my self assume that………….. More over, چنین ساختاری نداریم اصلا.
not comparable with their basic education fields. معنی این مشخص نیست که دقیقا چیه
بازنویسی کن
There are uncountable advantages for visiting such difficult places for travelers. In one hand, it allows them to experience and enjoy the natural beauty and unique features of these destinations. It is a magnificent opportunity for them to explore and observe rare landscapes and excellent prospects. As an example: in my country, there is a lake that located in south-east of Iran named LYPAR LAKE, which is one of the most popular destinations among travelers due to its imposing lake view and lake color. Travelers can enjoy the pink and salty water. Moreover, the salty water has healing power. It can be an unforgettable memory for them. (107) On the other hand, there are numerous disadvantages, associated with visiting these places, mainly because it is dangerous for tourists who are not prepared adequately. In other word, travelling to any destinations has its own preparations to protect travelers from any harm and danger. The equipment and tools must be appropriate for the situation. They should learn basic emergency actions and first aid due to handle rough circumstance. For instance, last year a group of travelers climbed the BINALOOD Mountain near our hometown, without enough information and suitable equipment. In addition, they did not pay attention to the danger notices. Unfortunately, they stuck in snow and four of them lost their lives. so their fantastic experience became a disaster. (114)
uncountable advantages چنین ترکیبی نداریم. ترکیب ها حتما باید در لانگمن چک شده باشه از خودتون ننویسید.
In one hand, این ترکیب هم درست نیست. حتما چک کنید.
There are uncountable advantages for visiting such difficult places for travelers./ On the other hand, there are numerous disadvantages, associated with visiting these places, این جمله نباید در آغاز پاراگراف باشه. خود مورد مد نظر رو بنویسید. کلی گویی نکنید اصلا
emergency actions حتما چک کنید که عبارت درست و واقعی چی هست. این ترکیب ها کاملا غلط هستند و نمره شما رو پایین میاره.
due to handle این ترکیب از نظر دستوری غلط هست. due to رو در دیکشنری چک کنید.
بقیه موارد خوب هست.
Writing 5th session
These places can be dangerous for tourists, which is one of the disadvantages of visiting areas with harsh conditions because most of these places are situated near wildlife habitats which can be a risk for tourists’ life. These places often don’t have emergency services or it’s difficult for these services to reach them promptly. For example, in my country, tourists who want to visit deserts like the Kavir Lut do not have access to emergency services, which increases the risk of death. Some dangerous animals live in these places such as poisonous snakes, saving tourists’ life from snakes attack is impossible and probably they die because of venomous snakes.(109 words)
One of the advantages of visiting places with extreme conditions for tourists is that these sites are exciting for energetic people specially young people. Young people are typically fascinated by doing impossible activities because they exited by having experience of visiting this areas . These destinations are interesting candidates for them. For instance, in my country, some young tourists aspire to live in caves using basic tools in bitterly cold weather like the cavemen who inhabited these places millions of years ago. They believe these activities provide new experiences that are excitable. They are thrilled to face difficult circumstances that lead them to choose these places. (106 words)
exited اسپلینگ ها رو خیلی دقت کنید.
are excitable. از لغات محدود به منابعی که در اختبار دارید بنویسید. نه حدس بزنید نه ترجمه کنید نه از منابع دیگه استفاده کنید.
در کل رایتینگ خیلی خوبی هست.
سلام. that اشاره به انسان نمی کند در لانگمن برای غیر انسان are excitable آمده
اینجا در مورد experience نوشتید.
اگر عبارت excitable experience در لانگمن هست که این ترکیب درست هست و اگر نیست یعنی غلط هست. خیلی جای بحث کردن نداره.
Listening IELTS Test No.19
1.B (middle day…> at one o’clock) (Technical design —>lecture computer assist how computer program help to design building)
2. B (drink container–>plastic bottle to keep soft drink) D (cold food—>sandwich and fruit)
3.A (cannot float—>shark have to keep moving constantly…id don’t keep moving they sink)
4.C (learn about–>significant place and single…from kanak people)
5.A the appearance –>see flags ,serial number,different tail airline
6.E watching..take off—>see plane landing
7.D collecting..equipment–>also like Souvenir I get my friends (3 tables,fork,seat belt,…)
همه درست بجز 5 و 6
دقت کن که میگه کدوم ها رو دوست داره. 5 و 6 کلا بین گزینه و چیزی که میشنویم تناقض هست.
HAPPINESS:
In one hand, teenage years are happy due to different reasons. First and foremost, happiness comes mainly from the low degree of responsibilities for them. Admittedly, they have only few things to be concerned about besides that most of them are so ambitious and motivated. For instance, juveniles can spend their free time with their peers and create pleasant and unforgettable moment.
On the other hand, adults can do what they are keen on without any limitations. As a salient example, if they have financial adequence and their own family, it’s undeniable that they can enjoy their lives. It’ s beyond doubt that, they we can see them happy if they be satisfacte by their attempting during their lives for futeure and spend their leisure time with family and friends. Thus, with more freedom to dictate their own lives, they also find more happiness.
تعداد لغات رو باید حتما در آخر پاراگراف بنویسید.
تعداد لغات باید 100 تا 110 کلمه باشه.
دلیل و توضیح باید 50 کلمه و مثال 50 کلمه باشه.
چند مورد دیگه هم رعایت نشده بنابراین باید آموزش پاراگراف نویسی رو با دقت زیاد ببینید:
✍️ آموزش ویدیویی نوشتن #پاراگراف های اصلی
https://youtu.be/3PZA8rZmpNQ
بنابراین این رایتینگ نیاز به بازنویسی داره.
اصلا نباید با شماره پاراگراف ها رو مشخص کنید نمره زیادی از دست میدید
so have a big چنین ساختاری اصلا نداریم
منبع شما برای این ساختار چی بوده؟ big portion of happy times
in the period of teenage, این ساختار بی معنی هست.
❌ حیلی از مواردی که گفتیم در این رایتینگ اصلا رعایت نشده.
پاراگراف ها باید 100 تا 110 کلمه باشند.
کل پاراگراف فقط بر روی دلیلی که در ابتدا آوردید متمرکز باشند و کلی گویی نکنید.
و از همه مهم تر تمام ساختارهایی که مینویسید باید چک شده و معنادار باشند.
دقت کنید اصلا نباید ساختاری رو از خودتون بنویسید. به زبان بسیار ساده با توجه به ساختارهایی که در کتاب هایی که دارید میخونید میبینید جمله سازی کنید. از خودتون چیزی اصلا نباید بنویسید. حتی یک جمله.
این رایتینگ رو باید با توجه به مواردی که گفتیم بازنویسی کنید.
In my point of view, being a teenager means having less social responsibilities. In other word, a teenager does not confront with serious problems such as payments, bills, work challenges, and family management. They have their own spare time and they can hang out with friends without being worry about anything at home. Although, in this period, they face with emotional and physical changes that may cause isolation and depression, but they are cheerful. For instance, there was a survey conducted among high school students in my hometown, which was about teenage life satisfaction, all the students were almost happy and free of anxiety and they only concern was about their studies. (112)
Conversely, adulthood presents a new prospect of life. An adult usually faces with a vast variety of both challenging and interesting occurrences. Independency is the most important achievement of becoming an adult that affects many aspects of our lives ranging from finding an appropriate job and earning money, having the chance of choosing their own life path and maintenance serious relationships. However, there is no doubt that it is a complicated phase. For example in my country when you become an adult, you can choose your work field and job career, this opportunity elevates their life satisfaction and as a result leads them to be happy. (106)
گفتیم که اصلا نباید به تحقیقات در رایتینگ های آیلتس اشاره کنید.
پاراگراف های اصلی نمیتونه نظر شما رو بگه. فقط 2 دیدگاه و در پاراگراف جدا در نتیجه گیری نظر خودتون.
مثال باید از کشور شما باشه و دقیقا توضیحاتی که دادید رو نشون بده. کلی گویی اشتباهه
آغاز پاراگراف اصلی باید دقیقا دلیل رو نشون بده هیچ چیز دیگه مثل کلیی گویی یا تکرار خود سوال یا هیچ چیز دیگه
نباید نوشته بشه
این ایرادها بزرگ هستند و کاملا با تدریس و سمپلی که گذاشتیم در تضاد.
برای رایتینگ های بعدی خیلی دقت کنید.
تصحیح رایتینگ
The teenage years are happiest time of people’s life because of the support of family. Teenagers receive family emotional and financial support because adults believe that teenagers need to get older to gain the experience that are necessary for independence. That allows teenagers to be happier than adults because they do not worry about necessities, their families typically provide their necessities. For instance, in my country, people are careful about teenagers’ life. They spent a lot of money for teenagers’ academic studies to have better future. They support teenagers by providing everything they need to have better education. Teenagers have happy time because they are not required to provide necessities by themselves. (112 words)
The adult years are happiest time of people’s life because they have jobs. Many adults choose to work because they can have an income by working, that allows them to be happy because they can have a better life by having income and that is pleasurable. They can spend money on a variety of enjoyable activities that make them feel happy. For instance, in my country, many employees allocate a portion of their salary for travel because that provides them pleasurable experiences. In other words, people can pay for a range of enjoyable activities when they have sufficient money and job makes it possible.(104 words)
بله درست شد. خیلی دقت کنید دفعه بعد اشتباه ننویسید.
The teenagers are very hopeful for future. They usually consider positive aspects of life and imagine their future full of the best adventures. Beside they enjoy of life at the moment without any concerns about future problems, they try to spend more time with their friends and have pleasure of recreational activities. They usually don’t have irreparable failure in life, hence they are happiness. For instance, in my country in the most of time they aren’t responsible for other members of family. When they are suggested something as amusement, is accepted by them without any consideration and they don’t worry about anything. It looks like they were born just to have fun and have an optimistic attitude in the future. (119 words).
Adult have sense of independence more and more. They can either decide for life’s issues themselves or can consult with others, so in both of these situations they feel free. All of their selections in deference aspect of life like job, lifestyle, city for living and other things are performed with their will, thus, it means they have a kind of freedom. For instance, in our culture in my country we have same experience when we talk about the results of our actions in life with others people, that does not matter whether they are positive or negative but authority of act is crucial. Our parents regardless of all challenges are happiness and role model for us. (117 words)
In my attitude each period of life has significant advantages and we had better to find them and live according to these reasons for have sense of happiness and improve our characteristics.
enjoy of این ساختار ترجمه فارسی هست. حتما حروف اضافه رو با دقت چک کنید.
future problems, they try آغاز و پایان جمله ها باید حتما مشخص باشه. در پایان جمله باید نقطه بگذاریم. با ویرگول نمیتونیم جدا کنیم.
deference aspect هم اسپلینگ غلط هست هم چنین ترکیبی رو اصلا نداریم. خیلی دقت کنید.
در پاراگراف دوم باید مشخص تر درباره اینکه واقعا چرا مستقل بودن در بزرگسالان بیشتر هست و به خوشبختی ربط پیدا میکنه صحبت کنید. ضمنا سعی کنید در توضیح از مثال زدن دور باشید و بعد در بخش مثال، مثال رو بنویسید.
در کل خیلی خوب هست.
Writing 3rd session
Adults often have a limited possible chance of happiness because most adults spend a significant port of their lives at work. Most people when getting older, they must have a job to provide their necessities. A main part of people’s life in adult years spend at work. This can lead to feel exhausted and unhappy because they think they sacrifice a part of their lives. For example, in my country, people in Tehran wake up early in the morning to go to work and back home in the evening. They spend many hours at work which frequently make them feel tired and unhappy. (103 words)
The teenage years are happiest time of people’s life because of the support of family. Teenagers receive family emotionally and financial support because adults believe that teenagers need to get older to gain the experience that are necessary for independence. That allows teenagers to be happier than adults because they do not worry about necessities, their families typically provide their necessities. For instance, in my country, people careful about teenagers’ life. They spent a lot of money for teenagers’ academic studies to have better future. They support teenagers by providing everything they need to have better education. Teenager have happy time because they are not required to provide necessities by themselves. (111 words)
در این رایتینگ ها هر دو دیدگاه باید پشتیبانی بشه. شاید سوال رو درست متوجه نشدید با دقت دوباره بخونید و سمپل رو هم ببینید.
emotionally and financial غلط هست هر دو باید یک ساختار دستوری باشه
people careful about این جمله فعل نداره
در کل خوب هست به نوع پاسخی که باید به سوالات دیسکاشن داده بشه و منبع درست و مشخص برای ساختارهایی که مینویسید خیلی دقت داشته باشید.
The teenagers are very hopeful for future . they usually consider positive aspects of life and imagine their future full of the best adventures . Beside they enjoy of life at the moment without any concerns about future problems ,they try to spend more time with their friends and have pleasure of recreational activities . For instance , in my country teenagers that they are studding in high school , try to plan motivated to achieve top ranks at university . They decide to have high level qualification without any doubt . They do not observe any obstacle on their way why is that they have an optimistic attitude in the future .(105 words)
that they این ساختار غلط هست اصلا نباید دوباره ضمیر اضافه کنید.
studying دقت کنید.
plan motivated بی معنی هست. منبع شما چی بوده برای این ساختار؟؟؟
در کل خوب هست. اگر بخش توضیحات یکم طولانی تر و مثال یکم مشخص تر به صورت یک مثال نه کلی گویی باشه بهتر هست.
به منبع ساختارهایی که مینویسید خیلی دقت بفرمایید.
There are a lot of job opportunities in a big city. Many companies and industries develop many projects in big cities why is that they needs lots of employees to handle their activities so they provide the range of variety jobs . Individuals can get a proper job , compatible with their qualifications and have a more salary it can be prepare better
circumstance .(62 WORDS) For instant , in Tehran where is the biggest town and capital of Iran too , the large number of online taxis come from another small town and when they are asked about reason they express that job opportunities are very available in Tehran and working there is affordable and they can have more income at the special time.(57 words)
Living in small cities have many benefits like clean air . Generally pollution in these cities is the range of low level and people enjoy clear sky and environment without any noise . they usually calm and relax and have a sense of beautiful emotion . they can use of organic production that is produced of clean water and soil. (57 words) For example , in our country Iran when doctors visit their lung and heart patients advice them to move small town where have a clean air until they can go walking without any concerns about breathing polluted air . Even the doctors believe that living in clear environment is effective more than drugs .(51 words)
در کل خوب نوشته شده اما دفت کنید پاراگراف باید 100 کلمه باشه و تعداد کلمات در آخر نوشته بشه. وسط پاراگراف نباید سر خط برید. یکپارچه باشه
فرمت کلی پاراگراف خوب هست در اینجا
چشم حتما ممنون از شما
In one hand, there are uncountable advantages of living in big cities but the important one is the vast variety of job opportunities. Big cities with their urgent requirement to hire labor forces in different levels of education and experiments have provided job positions for everyone, Also the number of factories, governmental and private sectors, banks and hospitals are extremely huge, so any job seekers can find an appropriate position. In addition, the salary is incomparable with its same situation in small cities. As an example: Tehran is the capital city of our country where contained almost 50% of factories, industrial parks and infrastructures industries that provide distinct positions and occupations.
On the other hand, living in small cities accompanies the plot of healthy life. The life that does not contain air and environmental pollution. also everyone has access to the consumption of organic food and drinks. There is no serious traffic issues so transportation is smooth. The relation between people is quiet friendly and the family radical is strong due to their beliefs. For example: my hometown Bojnourd , is a small city located in north east of Iran where there is no skyscrapers around and every house has its own backyard and the town is surrounded by paddy fields and vineyards. The life is peaceful and we have access to the organic source of vegetables, meet, diary and nuts.
هم فرمت هم جمله سازی ها خوب هستند آفرین.
Some people prefer to live in a big city. Others think it is better to live in a small town.
Discuss both views.
Big cities have a lots of attractions which the main one is job oppotunities. As a lot of small and big companies usually gather in big cities, more job capacity is provided in these cities. These job opportuinities needed professional engineers, academic researchers, ordinary workers, etc which all of them would probably reason of big city,s attraction leads to choose big cities for living. For example in TEHRAN, capital city of my contry, IRAN, there are central of tele-commucations operators like Irancell. Many computer students from all around unversities are keen on work in Irancell Company. So whenever they gratuade from university, choose big city of Tehran for living and work. All in all, variety of job opportunities absorb people to live in big cities.
On the other hand, there are some one who prefer to live in a small town which the main reason may be mental and physical health. As in small towns there are fewer vehicles, the air pollution in much lower than big and crowded cities. Non-polution or low amount of it, certainly lead to physical and mental health which have a tight relation with living in small cities. For example in my city Bojnurd, central city of North Khorasan province, which is a small city in parallel with Tehran, we have only 20-25 days of polutet air (This amount in tehran is about 125 to 150 days in a year!). So physical problems which caused by pollution is much lower in small cities.
آخر پاراگراف ها حتما تعداد کلمات رو بنویسید.
فرمت پاراگراف درست هست اما باید به جمله های بی معنی و ساختارهایی که بدون منبع نوشته شدن دقت کنید. این سبک نوشتن بدون چک کردن در دیکشنری به صورت اطلاع عمومی باعث میشه نمره زیادی رو در بخش لغت وگرامر از دست بدید و گاهی خواننده انگلیسی زبان متوجه منظور شما هم نشه.
بنابراین گرامر رو باید خیلی دقت کنید. من ویس میذارم خطاها رو میگم چون زیاد هستند نمیشه دونه دونه نوشت.
Writing 1st session
Living in big cites is better than small towns because big cities have more job opportunities. There are many companies in big cities which owners spend more money. That allows people to have more options to choose a job because these companies may have more customers in big cities, they need to employ more employees. For example, in my country, many people move from small towns to Tehran. They prefer to live in Tehran because they think there are enormous job opportunities. That helps people to find a job quickly. Most companies and owners prefer to start their business in big cities like Tehran to have more customers.(108 words)
Some people prefer to live in small towns because air pollution in big cities has a negative effect on human’s body. The number of vehicles and factories in small towns is fewer than in big cities. In other words, the amount of fumes that cause air pollution decreases significantly. Fumes contain various gases which damage human’s body. For instance, in my country, many people move from Tehran to small towns because Tehran has air pollution and that causing health risks. They believe air pollution can increase the risk of developing lung diseases. Living in small towns can be healthier big cities.(101words)
خوب هست آفرین.
Essential words unit1
1. Living in big cities has several negative aspects, for example air pollution.
2. Some students are fascinated by studying abroad.
3. High consumption of fossil fuels gradually increase air pollution.
4. It is imperative to replace fossil fuel energy with renewable energy sources to reduce air pollution.
5. Living in small towns is better because big cities have air pollution that impact on human’s body.
impact اگر فعل هست بدون on به کار ببرید بهتره
oxford word skill – lesson 1
Foreign: My wife and I will travel to a foreign country next month. While we will be there, we are foreigner.
Basic: The basic rule of this job is to be patient. However, other colleagues believe that you should be professional basically.
Recognize: They recognized the process of factory is more complicated to understand easily.
Go through something: When we faced with a foreign vocabulary, first of all we go through a dictionary, look up for definition an examples.
جمله ها بدون منبع نوشته شدند. این شکل اصلا مورد تایید ما نیست.
Oxford word skill lesson2
Aware: a group of scientists are aware of smell of some poison in the air.
Obvious: It is obvious that the average of world’s temperature is rising up in recent decade.
Encourage: It is great full to encourage disability people for their motivation.
Effectively: Our IELTS band will improve effectively by joining to IELTS2 online courses.
Express: whenever we are in a bad situation, usually express our feeling by shout.
Motivated: Among my motivated colleagues , those who motivate others are placed in high level of progress.
Keen: Scientists keen to discover new planets. In another way they are keen on exploring in the Cosmos.
world’s average temperature باید باشه دقت کنید.
is rising با recent decades نمیخوره باید حال کامل باشه
جمله encourageبی معنی هست. خارج از منبع ننویسید. ضمنا شماره بزنید.
جمله express هم بی معنی هست.
بقیه هم بدون منبع نوشته شده اند. این شکل اصلا مورد تایید نیست و جمله ها نادرست هستند متاسفانه.
Common mistakes in grammar
1. Many people these days think of living in big cities because they have a low income in small towns.
2. Vehicles produce fumes in big cities which have a negative effect on human’s body.
3. Some people prefer to live in big cities because they can enjoy more facilities.
4. Students can learn better by studying abroad.
5. In small towns, people can transport easily without spending time in traffic.
transport به این شکل بکار نمیره بهتره بگی move around
Collocation “income”
1. Some people prefer to live in big cities because they have a low income in small towns.
2. Some people prefer to have a fixed income.
3. People can have higher incomes in big cities.
4. The average income in big cities is higher than small towns.
5. People can increase their income by living in big cities.
خوب هستند.
Collocation “environment”
1. Human’s activities such as the high consumption of fossil fuels, can pollute the natural environment.
2. The government should encourage people to use renewable energy instead of fossil fuels to protect the environment.
3. High consumption of fossil fuels in big cities can impact on the environment.
4. The government should find an alternative energy because fossil fuels are bad for the environment.
5. Using renewable energy will not harm the environment.
خوب هستند آفرین.
Oxford Skills Words unit17
1. People who consume fast food excessively, put on weight gradually.
2. People should cut down on amount of fast food because it’s harmful .
3. Living in big cities with air pollution is unhealthier than living in small towns.
4. Fast food contains certain ingredients that can increase blood pressure levels.
5. French fries, contain higher levels of fat, which can increase blood cholesterol levels.
خوب هستند اما به اینکه ربط به تاپیک های رایتینگ داشته باشه هم دقت کن.
Select reading per-intermediate unit1
1. Consuming fast food excessively has harmful side effects for people.
2. Some people prefer to live in small towns to reduce mental stress.
3. In traditional universities, students can do experiment about a subject in laboratory.
4. Some people prefer to move from one company to another one because they have trouble working in their previous workplace.
5. Researchers believe that air pollution can be reduced if governments invest in renewable energy.
خوب هستند ادامه بده
It is widely believed that the principal goal of science is enhancing the quality of life for those living all around the world. I am in complete agreement with this attitude as science can improve individual’s health and provide food security for them. (43 words)
To begin with, science has a significant impact on people’s health. There have been major advances in medical devices and procedures which can reduce the consequences of life threatening diseases on human life owing to the fact that people living in various regions have access to modern medical technologies and it helps them to address health challenges efficiently. For instance, cancer is an incurable and debilitating disease. In my hometown we have state of the art medical instruments which offer a precious opportunity to diagnose cancer in early stages and treat it effectively. Therefore, people often experience the least complications and restore their health again. (105 words)
In addition, science can play a vitally important role in offering food security for the people. In fact, advanced science enabled individuals, especially farmers to produce significantly more products because they have an opportunity to use modern agricultural equipments which can result in increasing agricultural output and improve the stability of the food supply. For example, farmers who live in Urmia tend to use the latest mechanical equipments to irrigate wheat fields. By use of these facilities, they can increase their productivity as wheat is sensitive to the amount of water it receives and these devices can control irrigation, more crops are produced. So it can provide enough food for the population. (112 words)
In conclusion, improving the lives of people is a major and crucial purpose of science. I totally agree with this idea due to its significant impact on human health and sustainable food supply in the world. (36 words)
equipment اس جمع نمیگیره
مواردی که بعنوان دلیل نوشتی بیشتر مثال هستند تا دلیل.
این سوال یکم فلسفی هست. بعنوان یک پاسخ ساده در شرایط آزمون خوبه اما بیشتر باید دلیل بیاریم که چرا باید اینطوری باشه نه اینکه کاربردهای مفیدش چیه.
Given is a diagram illustrating the process by which ethanol is manufactured.
Overall, the process of producing a biofuel which is called ethanol involves eight main steps commencing with absorbing energy by plants and trees and ending with emitting carbon dioxide by various vehicles. It is also notable that this process is a mixture of natural and mechanical phases.
In the first stage, trees and other plants receive energy which involves sunlight and carbon dioxide and are essential for their growth. Consequently, fully grown trees and plants are harvested by especial equipment. After pre-processing phase which turns raw materials into cellulose, processing step starts and in this step cellulose is converted into sugar molecules by use of different chemicals in major laboratories.
At this point, sugars undergo a biological process and microbes are added in order to break down sugars and produce ethanol. Finally, the ethanol is used to power different vehicles like car, truck and plane and they burn ethanol and release carbon dioxide as a waste into the atmosphere and then the cycle starts again.
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خیلی خوب نوشتی آفرین. فقط باید روز timing کار کنی.