رایتینگ نمودار میله ای کمبریج آیلتس جلد 12 آکادمیک تست 1

Cambridge IELTS Academic 12 Test 1 Task 1 Bar Chart Band 9

در اینجا یک نمودار میله ای از تست 1 جلد 12 سری کتاب های کمبریج آیلتس آکادمیک را همراه با جواب نمره 8 تا 9 با هم میبینیم. این رایتینگ از انواع Bar Chart می باشد و پاسخگویی به آن نیازمند شناسایی و دسته بندی اطلاعات اصلی یا Main Feature ها در نمودار و گزارش آن ها در 4 پاراگراف (مقدمه و جمع بندی و 2 پاراگراف توضیحات اصلی) است. بعد از ارایه نمونه نمره 8 برای این نمودار، تحلیل و آنالیز گرامر و لغات آکادمیک همین سمپل را خواهیم داشت. اگر با این بخش از رایتینگ نویسی آیلتس آکادمیک آشنایی ندارید، انواع 7 نوع سوال در تسک 1 رایتینگ آیلتس آکادمیک پیشنهاد بعدی ما به شما عزیزان است.

سوال کمبریج 12 تست 1 آکادمیک رایتینگ تسک 1 (نمودار میله ای)

متن سوال کمبریج 12 تست 1 آکادمیک رایتینگ تسک 1

This graph illustrates the percentage of people who preferred different types of transport in a particular city between 2000 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

نمونه پاسخ نمره 9 آیلتس:

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of males and females in Australia across different age groups who participated in regular exercise in 2010. It seems regardless of age, female Australians in general show more involvement in physical exercise than their male counterparts.

Overall, women’s participation was highest in the 45-54 age group, while men showed the highest level of engagement in exercise among those aged 15-24. It is also notable that, with the exception of the youngest group, a higher proportion of women exercised regularly compared to men across all age categories.

Among women, 47.7% of those in the youngest age group engaged in regular exercise. Participation increased steadily with age, reaching a peak of 53.3% in the 45-54 age group. However, after this age band, the percentage began to decline, with only 47.1% of women in the oldest age group exercising regularly.

For men, participation was highest in the 15-24 age group, at 52.8%. This was the only group where a higher percentage of men exercised regularly compared to women. Male participation dropped to its lowest point in the 35-44 age bracket, at 39.5%, before rising again to 46.7% among those aged 65 and over, a rate that was nearly identical to that of women in the same age group.

Total = 211 Words

لغات و ساختارهای گرامری پیشرفته به کار رفته در سمپل کمبریج 12 تست 1 آکادمیک

در اینجا نگاهی به ساختارهای دستوری پیشرفته این سمپل که نقش بسزایی در رسیدن به نمره 8 تا 9 آن داشته اند داریم. یکی از معیارهای اصلی نمره دهی در رایتینگ آیلتس چه در تسک 1 و چه در تسک 2، ساختارهای به جا و پیشرفته گرامری و درست بودن جمله ها از نظر دستوری می باشد.

1. Comparative Structures:
   • Example: “a higher percentage of women than men exercised regularly”
   • Explanation: This comparative structure is used to highlight differences between groups. It demonstrates the ability to compare data effectively, which is essential for Band 8 and 9 responses.
2. Passive Voice:
   • Example: “was highest in the 45-54 age group”
   • Explanation: Passive voice is often used in academic writing to emphasize the action or outcome rather than the subject performing it. It helps create a more formal and objective tone.
3. Time Expressions:
   • Example: “in 2010,” “then,” “before”
   • Explanation: Time expressions guide the reader through the data or process chronologically. They are crucial in Task 1 for clarity and understanding, showing when the data or trends occurred.
4. Complex Sentences:
   • Example: “While women’s participation was highest in the 45-54 age group, that of men peaked among 15- to 24-year-olds.”
   • Explanation: This sentence combines two related ideas into a single sentence, showing the ability to link information logically. It enhances fluency and coherence.
5. Quantitative Data Reporting:
   • Example: “47.7% of women… 53.3% in the 45-54 age group”
   • Explanation: Specific data points are included to support the analysis, which is key to providing an accurate and precise response. Including data ensures that the report is grounded in the information presented in the task.

فرمت رایتینگ تسک 1 برای نمره کامل

در این بخش هم نگاهی به فرمت رایتینگ بالا داریم. این سمپل نمره 8 تا 9 از چه فرمتی پیروی کرده و محتوای آن چه ویژگی هایی داشته است؟

1. Introduction:
   • Purpose: Paraphrase the question and provide a clear introduction to the data presented.
   • Example: “The bar chart illustrates the percentage of males and females in Australia across different age groups who participated in regular exercise in 2010.”
2. Overview:
   • Purpose: Summarize the main trends or key points in the data without going into too much detail. This should highlight the most significant patterns or differences observed.
   • Example: “In general, women’s participation was highest in the 45-54 age group, while men showed the highest level of engagement in exercise among those aged 15-24.”
3. Body Paragraphs:
   • Purpose: Provide a detailed description of the data, breaking it down by category or group. Each paragraph should cover a specific set of data, such as trends for women or men.
   • Example: “Among women, 47.7% of those in the youngest age group engaged in regular exercise. Participation increased steadily with age, reaching a peak of 53.3% in the 45-54 age group.”
4. Data Presentation:
   • Purpose: Include specific figures to support your points. This adds accuracy to your writing and demonstrates the ability to interpret and describe numerical data.
   • Example: “52.8% of men in the 15-24 age group exercised regularly.”
5. Cohesion and Coherence:
   • Purpose: Use cohesive devices such as “while,” “however,” “in contrast,” and “before” to connect ideas and ensure that the information flows logically from one point to the next.
   • Example: “However, after this age band, the percentage began to decline.”
6. Formal and Objective Tone:
   • Purpose: Maintain an academic and neutral tone throughout the response. Avoid using personal opinions or informal language.
   • Example: “It is also notable” rather than “It is interesting to note.”

نمونه های بیشتر و تصحیح رایگان رایتینگ شما ❤️

100 نمونه رایتینگ آیلتس پیشنهاد آخر ما به دوستان گرامی هست. این نمونه رایتینگ های تسک 1 آیلتس از پرتکرار ترین نوع سوالات این بخش و همچنین جدیدترین موضوعات می باشند. این مجموعه توسط یکی از سایت های معتبر انگلیسی زبان فعال در حوزه آیلتس تنظیم شده است. همچنین برای تصحیح رایگان رایتینگ آیلتس تسک 1 و 2 به صورت نامحدود در کانال تلگرام رایتینگ ما همراه باشید و به ادمین برای تصحیح رایتینگ اطلاع دهید.