کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده
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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده – صفحه کلاس روزهای زوج تیرماه 1397

این صفحه مربوط به دوره فشرده آیلتس روزهای شنبه چهارشنبه ساعت 4 تا 6 است که در تیرماه 1397 آغاز شده. در این صفحه تکالیف و توضیحات وارد شده و زبان آموزان رایتینگ ها و پرسش های خود را در بخش دیدگاه ها وارد خواهند کرد و از این راه با مدرس در تماس خواهند بود.

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 22 ام و 23 ام 

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Speaking Questions part 3 Questions 61 to 80  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 57 to 61

Essential Words for IELTS Unit 7 kill

Objective IELTS Intermediate Kill

Objective IELTS Advanced Page 5 to 35 just listening and reading parts

Common mistakes at IELTS Advanced Unit 1 to 10

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 19 20  از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 22 ام و 23 ام 

تسک 2

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 20 ام و 21 ام 

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Speaking Questions part 3 Questions 41 to 60  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 51 to 56

Essential Words for IELTS Unit 6 kill

Objective IELTS Page 66 to 100 just listening and reading parts

Common mistakes at IELTS Intermediate Kill

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 17 18  از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 20 ام و 21 ام 

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ایده پردازی مدرس برای این سوال: 

Agree

Job requirements may be limiting for one gender
#pose a threat
#too demanding

Certain jobs may not be satisfying for one gender
#too delicate
#require emotion and patience

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 18 ام و 19 ام 

Speaking Questions part 3 Questions 21 to 40  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 46 to 50

Essential Words for IELTS Unit 5 kill

Objective IELTS Page 46 to 65 just listening and reading parts

Common mistakes at IELTS Intermediate unit 13 to 20

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 15 16  از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 18 ام و 19 ام 

تسک 1

تسک 2

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 16 ام و 17 ام 

Speaking Questions part 3 Questions 1 to 20  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 41 to 45

Tactics for listening Expanding unit kill

Open forum 2 kill

Essential Words for IELTS Unit 4 kill

New Insight into IELTS Listening unit 8

Objective IELTS Page 26 to 45 just listening and reading parts

Common mistakes at IELTS Intermediate unit 6 to 12

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 13 14  از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 16 ام و 17 ام 

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 14 ام و 15 ام 

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Speaking Questions part 2 kill  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 37 to 40

Tactics for listening Expanding unit 9 to 15

Open forum 2 unit 4 5 6 7

Essential Words for IELTS Unit 3 kill

New Insight into IELTS Listening unit 6 7

Objective IELTS Page 7 to 25 just listening and reading parts

Common mistakes at IELTS Intermediate unit 1 2 3 4 5

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 11 12  از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 14 ام و 15 ام 

تسک 2 و تسک 1

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 12 ام و 13 ام 

 

Speaking Questions part 2 Questions 23 to 30  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 32 to 36

Tactics for listening Expanding unit 1 to 8

Open Forum 1 kill

Open forum 2 unit 1 2 3

Essential Words for IELTS Unit 2 kill

New Insight into IELTS Listening unit 4 5

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 11 12  از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 12 ام و 13 ام 

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نمونه رایتینگ نوشته شده توسط مدرس در سطح نمره 7 

The chart illustrates the figures of sale (in millions) for five top brands of mobile phone producers in three separate years of 2009, 2011 and 2013.

The sales of Samsung and Nokia appear to be dramatically higher than that of other three (Apple, LG and ZTE). In 2009, Samsung sold less than 250 million units while this number for Nokia was about twice as much, just under 450 million. While  the sales for Samsung grew rapidly to a peak of 450 million units in 2013, Nokia showed the opposite trend and fell to a low of 250 which is almost the starting point for Samsung in 2009.

In 2009, Apple sold only few million phones but LG hand a highest point of 120 million. In 2013, both brands sold about 90 millions. However, by 2011, the sales figures for Apple rose exponentially to a peak of 150 million cellphones but LG  reached a low of 70 million units. The other brand, ZTE, almost stayed the same during these years at the sales level of 50 million cellphones.

Overall, while Samsung and Apple showed an upward trend during these three years, the general trend for LG and Nokia was the falling one.

(201 words)

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توضیحات استاد سایمن:

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دانلود مجموعه ویدئوها:

https://ielts2.com/دانلود-رایگان-ویدیوهای-سایمون-مهارت

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تسک 1 جنرال – نامه

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 11 ام

Speaking Questions part 2 Questions 16 to 22  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 27 28 29 30 31

Tactics for listening intermediate kill

Open Forum 1 unit 5 6 7 8 9 10

Essential Words for IELTS Unit 1 kill

New Insight into IELTS Listening unit 1 2 3

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 9 10 از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 11 ام و 12 ام 

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 9 ام و 10 ام 

Speaking Questions part 2 Questions 1 to 15  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 22 23 24 25 26

Tactics for listening intermediate unit 12 to 18

Open Forum 1 unit 1 2 3 4

Select Readings Pre-intermediate unit 8 9 10  (اختیاری)

Essential Words for IELTS Unit 1 part 1

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 7 8    از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف  رایتینگ جلسه 9 ام و 10 ام 

تسک 1 آکادمیک

تسک 2

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه 7 ام و 8 ام 

Speaking Questions part 1 Questions 111 to 131  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 18 19 20 21

Tactics for listening intermediate unit 6 7 8 9 10 11

Real 2 Listening and Speaking kill

Select Readings Pre-intermediate unit 5 6 7

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 5 6   از این صفحه ببینید

10 more units from Oxford Practice Grammar (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 7 ام و 8 ام

تسک 1 آکادمیک 

Sample Answer by Pouya Abolqasemi

The graph shows the average weekly time spent by children at the age of 10 to 11 on two different leisure activities (TV and computer) at home. (27)

Schoolchildren spend just under 4 hours a week on computer at the beginning of the period in 2000. This number increased steadily for the next 4 years to 15 hours in 2004. Then it increased more slowly during the following 4 years to 2008 to reach a peak of almost 22 hours per week. (54)

Time spent on TV was much higher compare to computer at the beginning of the period. It started at 21 hours in 200 and stayed the same until 2003. At this time it showed a downward trend and fell to 15 hours in 2004. During the next 4 years up to the end of period in 2008, despite some fluctuations, it remained stable at this level. (66)

Overall, it seems children’s preference for these two pastime activities changed dramatically and during this nine-year period they have reversed. (20)

(167 Words)

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دیدن نمونه پاسخ ها در: 

رایتینگ های آیلتس کتاب IELTS Write Right بهمراه پاسخ

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه 5 ام و 6 ام

سوال و نمونه پاسخ تسک 1 آکادمیک 

آموزش صوتی رایتینگ آیلتس آکادمیک بخش اول

در اینجا کوشش شده یک نمونه پاسخ با جمله ها و ساختار هایی کمابیش دشوار ارائه شود. پیشبینی میشود این پاسخ نمره ای در سطح 7 تا 7.5 دریافت نماید.

Two maps depict a tropical island of a few hundreds square meters before and after the construction of some leisure facilities for tourists.

It appears that two sites for tourists accommodation have been built, which are connected to each other and to other areas with footpath. There is also a reception in the middle of the island, which is accessible by a vehicle track from the southern part, where a pier is constructed for some pleasure boats. The other significant change is a single restaurant in the northern part of the island that can be also accessed by vehicles. The beach in the western side can be used for swimming after this development. There are also some palm trees in the western and eastern regions of the island, which seem to be untouched by this change.

Overall, the development which appears to be more concentrated on the western side and the center, has dramatically changed the face of the island in a way that it can accommodate a few hundreds of tourists at the same time. (177 Words)

آموزش صوتی رایتینگ آیلتس آکادمیک بخش اول

نمونه پاسخ در سطح نمره 7

Two maps show the construction of facilities in an island. One map show the situation before and one map after the construction.

In the first map there is not much for possible tourists to enjoy except a swimming area in the left side of the island. How ever in the second map there is a restaurant in the middle of the island on the left close to a reception. There is a vehicle track for tourists who want to reach the reception or the restaurant. Other important change is the construction of several accommodation sites for tourists not far from the reception. Other important facilities for enjoyment of tourists are the boats for sailing in the southern side of the island,where a pier can be seen and a beach for swimming in the left side.

Overall, it seems the island is totally different after the construction of tourist facilities and especially the western and middle parts can be a good place for tourists to enjoy their stay. (167 Words)

آموزش صوتی رایتینگ آیلتس آکادمیک بخش اول – نمونه پاسخ نمره 7

نمونه پاسخ زیر که در پایان کتاب کمبریج آیلتس جلد 9 بعنوان نمونه جواب نوشته شده توسط شرکت کننده در آزمون برای نمره 7 نوشته شده را بهمراه توضیحات اگزمینر(تصحیح کننده) مشاهده میفرمایید.

آموزش صوتی رایتینگ آیلتس آکادمیک بخش اول

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تسک 2

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه چهارم

Speaking Questions part 1 Questions 57 to 77  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 11 12

Tactics for listening Basic Unit 14 to 17

Real 1 Listening and Speaking Unit kill

Real 2 Listening and Speaking Unit 1 2 3 4

Select Readings Elementary Unit 9 10

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 1 2  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Practice Grammar Unit 21 to 30 (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف رایتینگ جلسه چهارم

تسک 1

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه سوم

Speaking Questions part 1 Questions 36 to 56  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 8 9 10

Tactics for listening Basic Unit 9 to 13

Real 1 Listening and Speaking Unit 10 to 14

Select Readings Elementary Unit 7 8

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 1 2  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Practice Grammar Unit 11 to 20 (اختیاری)

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکلیف رایتینگ جلسه سوم

رایتینگ کامل با مقدمه و نتیجه گیری

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه دوم

Speaking Questions part 1 Questions 21 to 35  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Word Skills Intermediate Unit 6 7

Tactics for listening Basic Unit 6 to 8

Real 1 Listening and Speaking Unit 6 to 9

Select Readings Elementary Unit 5 6

Cambridge Grammar for IELTS Unit 1 2  از این صفحه ببینید

Oxford Practice Grammar Unit 1 to 10 (اختیاری)

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کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکلیف رایتینگ جلسه دوم

ایده پردازی و نوشتن پاراگراف مقدمه برای رایتینگ Task 2 زیر: 

 

کلاس آنلاین آیلتس فشرده زوج تیرماه – تکالیف جلسه اول 

Speaking Questions part 1 Questions 1 to 20

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  • The global use of fewer languages has resulted in the death of languages. Although some people think that to have an easier life, losing languages is not important, others including me have an opposite idea. This essay will discuss both of these views. (41)
    On the one hand, fewer languages would lead to a faster pace of globalization. First of all, with the disappearance of several languages, money and time would be saved which in turn it is easier. For instance, Malay people as global citizens have not spent years to study English to have co-operation with other countries, since it has been defined as their official language and this consideration has ended to their economic welfare. Secondly, one of the obvious advantages of language death is narrowing down the gaps among nations to reduce the conflicts and increase more mutual understanding. Accordingly, when people understand what other people want to present they will have a comfortable feeling. (111)
    On the other hand, losing languages will result in cultural and political difficulties. First of all, the loss of languages means the loss of civilization and any other invaluable knowledge related to our nation and culture. Thus, not only the world would be burden with the lack of cultural diversity but also those who lose their local languages would be suffering from their missed identity. Secondly, as far as political issues are concerned, not being allowed to speak mother languages would result in the sense of inequality and not being important in the world. Therefore to treat each nation’s language equally, this chance should be given to the whole of them. (110)
    By the way of conclusion, while easier life will be facilitated with the loss of languages, its negative impacts on our lives is undeniable. (24)
    Total: 286

  • omid    omid

    it is true that plenty of languages are becoming lost through the modern era.although I agree up to the point of small number of languages leading to convenient life but,i firmly believe in preserving dying language from disappearing.this essay will discuss both of views.

    every language is a valued treasure enriched by great potentials for its purpose to make sense and connection.to begin with, it should be denoted that ,languages have strong dependency on the culture.it keeps the traditional customs alive.as a result,as a language starts to dying ,after death of last speakers, the culture and the old tradition will be diminished synchronically .moreover, as a matter of fact,words in every tongue has its own special implicating meaning that develop a common taste among the speakers and translation fails.consequently,we will lose arts,music and poems of the extincted languages which never could be replaced by any other language.

    on the other hand,using fewer languages in the whole world will result in much better transmission and fantastic communication nationwide.firstly,applying an international language can be effective in unifying people all around the world by sharing inordinate common interests with each other.however,if it would not be the mother-tongue of a large proportion.secondly,the chance of accessing resources becomes stronger in all corners of the world.for example an indian poor student can find the best materials for a considered research just through a simple search on net.ultimately,small number of languages has made things less complicated and breaks down barriers amid more people.

    in conclusion,however, fewer number of languages has some advantageos for the world,I believe in protection of dying languages as a valuable cultural heritages.

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    Residents in our planet speak out different languages after globalization many of them have disappeared. Although some people believe that various languages are not essential to have an easier life, others disagree. Both of these views will be discussed in this essay. (42)
    Some people believe that life will be easier with fewer languages. First of all, people can have effective communication with each other. Communication is the act of expressing ideas, information, and feelings, as well as understanding what is expressed by others. Speaking the same language will prevent misunderstanding in verbal communication. Secondly, there is no need to learn a new language to progress. Pupils in all around the world have to learn a certain language to have the opportunity of educating in a high ranked university. Their chance will be limited due to using too old-fashioned system of learning a language in some countries. (104)
    Others believe that we have to protect all languages. First of all, when a language dies we will lose that’s cultures and traditions. Language and culture are closely related. Variety of customs and cultures make the world more pleasure and charming. When you travel to another part of the world one of the most important things that makes your travel experience more enjoyable and fulfilling is the new custom and new culture. Secondly, we will lose a huge number of knowledge written in certain language. Absolutely there are many novel, myth and books which are written in a certain language. We should make every effort to maintain all languages in order to access these resources easily. (116)
    By way of conclusion, some people believe that life will be easier with fewer languages other people have a different perspective. They believe that we have to protect all languages to protect culture and tradition. (35)

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    ايده پردازي (with dying out languages life will be easier
    #agree
    – learning new language is time consuming
    _have to spend a huge amount of money to learn a new language
    #disagree
    – lack of variety in cultures makes life boring
    _-many myth are written in the minority language
    ايده پردازي دوم
    # agree
    – effective communication
    – there is no need to learn a new language to progress
    #disagree
    – the culture and traditions will vanish
    -we will lose numerous of knowledge written in certain language

  • Beheshteh    Beheshteh

    سلام استاد
    با تشكر از موضوع گرامري كه در كلاس مطرح شد.
    در حالتي كه خودمون ميخواهيم بك جمله بسازيم چطور بايد انتخاب كنيم كه بعد از noun كدام حالت را استفاده كنيم past participle يا present participation يا to-infinitifve c از لطفا راهنمايي فرماييد

    • admin    admin

      درود به شما

      مادامیکه از نظر دستوری نادرست نباشه مهم نیست کدوم ساختار رو استفاده میکنید و آزاد هستید ولی معمولا یک ساختار از بقیه بیشتر متداول هست و بیشتر به چشم آشناست که باتجربه ای که در طول زمان بدست می آرید میتونید انتخاب کنید.

      فعلا هر ساختاری که از نظر دستوری غلط نیست رو میتونید استفاده بفرمایید و فرقی نیست.

  • The pie chart prepared shows the population of different age groups in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050.
    Half of the population of Yemen is between zero and 14 years old in 2000, and 46.3% of the population are people aged 15-59, and the rest includes people over 60 years (3.6%). while in Italy in the same year (2000), more than half of the population consists of people aged between 15 and 59 years old, and the number of the people over 60 years is 24.1%, and finally the rest of the people are under 14 years old with 14.3% of the population.
    In 2050, people in the age group of 15-59 will form more than half of the population
    of Yemen, 37%of the population will be between zero and 14 years old and the remaining 5.7%will be over 60 years old. At the same time in Italy, the population of the 15-59 years and over 60 years will be approximately equal, and people under 14 years will only account for 11.5% of the population.
    overall, Yemen is an young country in 2000 will become an old country in 2050 also Italy is a middle-aged country in 2000 will become an old country in 2050.

    • admin    admin

      درود

      خطاهای زیادی در این مورد دیده نمیشه و توضیح خوبی ارایه شده.

      یک مشکل البته بلند بودن پاسخ هست که درازای اون به بیش از 200 کلمه میرسه. یک پاسخ خوب بین 170 تا 180 واژه هست.

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    Dear sir/madam
    I am writing this letter to you in order to express my satisfaction for the perfect service and the high quality of food that your restaurant provided us night. (31)
    Last Sunday was a special day. It was my intimate friend’s birthday. As well as I decided to surprise her at your restaurant. I visited your restaurant on 29th July, at around 7.30 pm, due to its convenient location and a good reputation for delicious food. I am glad that we picked your place. (54)
    The special occasion was my friend’s 30th birthday. As since my friend is a person who is picky eater moreover it was her birthday, I tried to find an ideal restaurant. I admire you. It really did worth the money we paid. (42)
    I would like to inform you that your restaurant is popular in our city because you have not only professional stuffs but also fresh foods. Also the reasonable price is an outstanding item to choose your restaurant at first. All of us were very delighted and we spend an amazing night. (51)
    Yours faithfully
    maria

  • Dear Sir or Madam
    I am writing to inform you how pleased I was to recommend your restaurant for holding a special event. As my friends and I commemorated our friendship anniversary at your restaurant last weekend and all fifteen of us from across the country participated. This celebration was important for us because we treasured our memories of university. (50)
    We were expected to attend at the restaurant at 8 pm which was arranged in advance. Hopefully, our first visit to the restaurant was impressive since there was a spacious reception area, elegantly furnished with fancy luxurious furniture. For another, the welcoming drink was fascinating and our tiredness went away. (50)
    In addition, we were lucky enough to celebrate our anniversary at your restaurant where the food and services impressed us. The waiters, bar staffs were attentive and ensured that the event ran smoothly, similarly, the meals were served in order. I am pleased to say that the variety and the tastes of cuisines were admirable too. (56)
    On behalf of all my friends, I would like to thank you and your team for hosting such a special event
    Yours Faithfully
    Faezeh

  • استاد سوالی که تو کلاس کار کردین با سوالی که تو سایت گذاشتین فرق نداره ؟

    • admin    admin

      کدوم سوال بوده به نظر شما؟؟ تا جایی که من یادم هست همین بوده. البته یه مورد رو خدمتت بگم اینکه در جلسات آخر آزاد هستی هر سوالی دوست داشتی از کتاب های کمبریج رو بفرستید چه تسک 1 چه تسک 2 این فقط پیشنهاد هست.

      • مقایسه سن افاد در سال های مختلف در یمن و ایتالیا نبود ؟
        امکانش هست هم تسک 1 و هم تسک 2 بفرستیم؟

        • admin    admin

          خوب آره الان هم همونه.

          مشکلی نیست بفرست

  • The relationship between gender and job performance has been widely debated. Although some people believe that males and females should choose their jobs appropriate for their gender, others including me have an opposite idea. This essay will discuss the second point. (39)
    On the one hand, it has been proved that conservative approaches towards gender ability in relation to job performance should be revised. First of all, these conventional perspective have resulted in impediments leading to job dissatisfaction. For instance, in my country, there are not any pilot university to accept women which force them to choose other jobs that might be discouraging. Secondly, even though there are different gender abilities, exceptions should be regarded as well. For instance, documentaries could remind us how far women’s boxing was strange in a half-century ago. Accordingly, if those women think that they were physically weak they could make such miraculous achievements. (107)
    On the other hand, jobs may be better proceed if both genders have cooperation together. First of all, females and males think systematically different and they could propose different methods to resolve the problems. For instance, to defend one proposal to gain a construction project, women are verbally fitter than men, however, men could manage the workers more efficiently. Secondly, the combination of men and women provides a sense of acceptance which is encouraging. For instance, when genders see the successes of their opposites, this belief will bring the mutual acceptance and motivate them to do their jobs better. (100)
    By the way of conclusion, while the conservative perspectives towards gender abilities have a negative impact on job performances, the combination of genders could proceed the occupations more effectively. (28)

  • Omiiid    Omiiid

    Different jobs allocated to men and women according to their s-x-e-s almost always.some people think men and women should be equal in job offerings while,others ,including me,believe in potential differences exists in either gender.

    It would be a good idea to treat men and women equally and without any bias.but,as a matter of fact,there are men s and women s job which is much convenient with potency of each s-ex.in other words,men have been applied in hard and heavy jobs whereas women,regarding their physical capacitance,have been offered delicate and less strength jobs.for example:a female lorry driver is very rare because it is a harsh muscular job needing huge muscular exerting.apparently men have occupied virtually all sort of physical and dangerous works.

    However,this occupational segregation is not only because of phisycallity.greater ambitious in men push them to achieving higher role in society as they are charismatic and have the power of determination in right time.in addition,women are better equipped to fill certain jobs by their character in carin services and the ability of felexibility in office jobs.afterwards,dexterity of women at fine jobs uniquely made them successful in some businesses which men never can combat them in those professions.ultimatly, working conditions is the must factor that determine requirements of a specific job to be done by specific employee.

    In conclusion,men and women are gifted various abilities to fulfill jobs in different fields.in my opinion they are both qualified enough to rech success by breeding their own individual strengths.

    • admin    admin

      درود

      پاراگراف های اصلی شما همچنان زیر 100 واژه هست.

      تعداد خطاهای موجود در کالوکیشن ها و ساختارها بالاست. کوشش کنید جمله های ساده تری بنویسید تا احتمال خطا کاهش یابد. همچنین گوگل کردن و چک کردن در دیکشنری لانگمن در یافتن خطاها بدون شک سودمند هست.

      ایده پردازی ها را جداگانه برای تایید بفرستید.

  • Mojgan    Mojgan

    These days, considering gender differences in occupation is debated. Although, some people believe that people of either gender can do any job efficiency, others including me think that is better to pay attention to inborn talent of people. This essay will discuss the second view point. (46 words)
    The job market is incredibly broad and there are different job requirements. First of all, there are some jobs that need more body strength and not proper for women. Researches has shown females are more vulnerable to work for long hours and doing heavy works. Therefore, Arthritis is more common in women for this reason. Secondly, there are some jobs that need more attention to detail and not beloved by men. Generally, most male concentrate to general issues instead of delicate jobs with a lot of details. So, doing jobs like artwork is less interested in men’s society and they are reluctant to do it. (105 words)
    Everyone has innate abilities that help them to become more successful at work. First of all, many studies show that females are naturally better communicator than male. This feature helps them to be more successful in positions that this ability is crucial such as marketing and sales. Secondly, men are generally better manger than women. Men tend to have greater general knowledge than women which is essential for managing. As a matter of fact, a lot of attention to detail will create many problems in decision making. Having an overview of issues is one of the key features for a successful manager. (102 words)
    In conclusion, different abilities are demanding in the labour market and everyone will be more successful at work if they consider to their natural abilities. (25 words)

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    Similarities and differences between male and female’s abilities is a challengeable issue in all society even advanced society. Although some people believe that the quality of their occupation depends on their gender, others including me do not believe. The second viewpoint will be discussed in this essay. (47)
    Categorizing people’s ability according their gender is an enormous mistake. First of all, there is an old stereotype of their ability which is often incorrect. It is certainly true that there are some specifications that are typically male and others which are typically female. But everybody is not a typical person. Secondly, being interested in doing some work do not relate to gender. Some women are stronger than some men moreover we can find men who are more emotional than some women. There are exceptions to every rule. Due to that everybody should be allowed to do every career which is traditionally reserved for the opposite s e x in order to prove their capable. (113)

    Education outweighs the gender to do different job. First of all, without consideration of gender the level of education is an important item. Efficient persons will employ via a correct employee selection system. In a correct employee selection system skills and education is more important than gender. Secondly, the educated men and women have different viewpoints and will promote effective team work. It is obvious that the men and women do not think similar each other thus they have different method of doing things it can be an opportunity for innovation and the discovery of more effective and efficient procedure in work. (101)

    By way of conclusion, categorizing people’s ability according their gender is a great mistake moreover it is undeniable that education outweighs the gender to do variant occupation. (27)

  • admin    admin

    Agree

    Job requirements may be limiting for one gender
    #pose a threat
    #too demanding

    Certain jobs may not be satisfying for one gender
    #too delicate
    #require emotion and patience

  • I agree
    Some jobs require physical power
    #need more muscular power
    #need tough spirit

    Some jobs need elegance
    #more finesse
    #more emotional

  • Mojgan    Mojgan

    Brain Storming
    Agree
    # Jobs have different requirements
    Some jobs need more body strength
    Some jobs need more pay attention to detail
    #innate ability helps people to be more successful at work
    Women are better communicator naturally than men
    Men are generally better manger than women

    Disagree
    #Both genders make workplace more efficient
    -They can learn from each other
    – Mixed workgroups can make better decision
    #Professional abilities are determined by the skills
    -education level improves proficiency
    – Regardless of gender, years of experience affecting skill acquisition

    • admin    admin

      ایده های خوبی هستند و ارتباط تقریبا کامل هست

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    ايده پردازي job and gender (disagree)
    # categorizing people’s ability according their gender is a mistake
    -there is an old stereotype of ability and it is incorrect
    – being interested in doing some work do not related to gender
    #education outweigh the gender
    we have to choose a correct comparing items
    -these differences will cause different and new way to do work

    • admin    admin

      ساپورت های ایده دوم برای من قابل درک نیست.فکر میکنم در انتخاب واژگان اشتباه کردید.

      • beheshteh    beheshteh

        اصلاح ساپورتهاي ايده دوم
        #education outweigh the gender
        -without consideration of gender, the level of educations is an important item
        – this educated men and women have different viewpoints and will promote effective team work

        • admin    admin

          تنها مشکلی که وجود داره این هست که کلید واژه different jobs در این ایده اصلی حذف شده

          • beheshteh    beheshteh

            استاد منظورتون اين است كه ايده اصلي به اين شكل باشد؟ education outweigh the gender to do different job
            با تشكر – در صورت نياز اصلاح فرماييد.

          • beheshteh    beheshteh

            با سلام
            آيا به اين شكل اصلاح گردد؟
            education outweigh the gender to do different jobs
            متشكرم لطفا در صورت نياز اصلاح فرماييد.

            • admin    admin

              جمله بی معنی هست.

              میتونید اینطوری بنویسید

              Education’s impact is more tremendous than gender alone

  • FAEZEH MOHAMMADI- CAM10-G-A
    Dear Sara
    I hope you are doing well. I’m writing to inquire some advice about finding an appropriate part-time job in Melbourne. As a newly enrolled student, I will be studying Master of Architecture this following September. In actual fact, I won’t be a fully occupied student and probably I would have a plenty of time to work as a civil drafter.
    As you are no doubt aware, there has been an economic recession in Iran since April, getting worse and worse. Consequently, considering the high tuition fees, we overseas students have to pay in addition to other costs of living, it necessitates me seeking for a part-time job to become financially independent.
    I was, therefore, wondering if you assist me to resolve this issue by introducing me to the agencies that tackle these kinds of tasks. Moreover, it would be great if there were some online job applications, registering in advance. Please find enclosed copies of my academic transcripts as well as work-related references that might be needed.
    I’m looking forward to hearing from you
    Faezeh
    Total: 175

  • Given are two figures providing a comparison of number of visitors and their level of satisfaction during the year before and after the Ashdown museum refurbishment.
    A glance at the table reveals annual visitors increased from 74000 to 92000 after renovation.
    One considerable change highlights by the pie chart is that percentage of dissatisfied visitors dropped from 40 to 15 after refurbishment and the survey discloses percentage of those who were very dissatisfied decreased from 10 to just half.
    The number of visitors who were very satisfied shows an upward trend, the amount was 15% and after redecoration reached almost double figure. The survey indicates that satisfied visitors percentage grew from 30 to 40 the year after refurbishment.
    The survey reveals during each one of these two years, 5% of visitors did not respond equally.
    Overall, the refurbishment resulted in increasing in number of persons who visit Ashdown museum and level of visitors satisfaction improved after renovation. (157 words)

  • Javadeb    Javadeb

    The table compares the number of visitors who went to Ashdown Museum, while the pie charts give information about visitor satisfaction form results of surveys in the year before and after the museum was renovated.
    The year before the refurbishment, 15% of visitors were very satisfied and just 1 year after the renovation 35% were very satisfied. A high percentage of visitors, about 40%, were dissatisfied a year before renovation and within a year after rehabilitation, this number dropped for about one third. Meanwhile, one in ten people said they had been very dissatisfied before renovations but one year after refurbishment, this decreased to half that number.
    On the same note, just under a third of visitors indicated that they were satisfied and a year after the rehabilitation the number of people who were satisfied jumped by 10%. Finally, in the last year before the renovation of this museum, total number of visitors was 74 thousand and it increased to 94 thousand in the first year after the renovation.
    Overall, the renovation has made a significant change in the number of guests and survey results.
    (185 words)

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    Dear Mary
    It has been so long since we last were in touch but I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to get a piece of advice about finding a proper part- time job during my staying in your country. (41)
    Fortunately, I could get a scholarship for master degree in mechanical engineering from British university. It is a 3 years’ program and will start 6 months later. The course not only enhances my professional career but also promote my job level. (41)
    Since, my scholarship will not cover all of my living expenses. As you can see, it is going to be really difficult for me to survive in a big city without a permanent job. According to the collage rules, I can work twenty hours per week. (45)
    Since you have been living there for a long time. I think you are able to help me to find a part-time job. I would appreciate if you forward my resume to your local friends and colleagues. Let me know what you think. (43)
    Hoping to hear from you soon. (6)
    Best regards
    Sali

  • Mojgan    Mojgan

    درود
    استاد رایتنگ هفته پیش من (Task1) بعد از اصلاح رو لطفاً بررسی بفرمایید.

    • admin    admin

      درود

      رایتینگ اصطلاحی شما که دوباره ارسال شده بود فیدبک گرفت.

  • Increasing global population has resulted in demanding more space for accommodation. Although some people believe government should use rural area to construct places to live, others, including me have the opposite opinion. This essay will discuss the second viewpoint.

    Country side must be preserved to protect the environment especially for next generation. First of all, population causes pollution over a long period of time. Increasing permanent inhabitants of rural area, result in producing large amount of waste and trash. In addition, these inhabitants have essential requirement of means of transportation. Air and water pollution will increase consequently. Secondly, clearing lands for buildings requires logging and destroying forest. Additionally, population of countryside requires constructing roads and transportation means. This result in damaging environment considerably to provide lands for this purposes and has a disastrous impact on environment.

    Furthermore, urbanization of rural areas create number of financial issues for governments. First of all, preparing countryside for constructing homes and other facilities will be costly. In addition, rural areas are away from cities and government should allocate a large budget to provide social services like hospital, transportation and educational facilities in rural areas. Secondly, in many places, countryside is delightful and is considered as a tourist attraction. Urbanization will destroy pristine places in countryside and number of tourists that visit these places will decrease. This will result in reducing government’s income from the tourist industry.

    Overall, making use of countryside to provide more accommodations will destroy environment and causes economic problems for governments. (250 words)

    • admin    admin

      درود

      رایتینگ شما بعد از ساعت 12 ارسال شده و فیدبک کلی دریافت میکند.

      ایراد خاص دستوری یا خطا در به که بردن واژگان دیده نشد اما میتوان ساختارهای پیچیده تر یا واژگانی در سطح بالاتر را به کار برد.

      از نظر Task Achievement و Coherence رایتینگ خوبی هست و خطای بزرگی به چشم نمیخورد.

  • FAEZEH MOHAMMADI
    The rapid growth of cities to address housing needs still have been a topical issue. Although, some people think that just constructing the countryside could lodge people, others including me have controversy idea. This essay will discuss the second point. (39)

    On the one hand, the natural and farm environments would be disappeared through the construction of suburbs. First of all, farmlands that times need to be taken they become so rich are under threat of vanishing. For instance, the recent news warned that gardens as vital manmade natural resources with valuable rare kinds of soil are drying to supply housing demand. Secondly, we could simply observe that since the commence of suburbs construction the creatures have been losing their natural habitats and they have become homeless. For instance, deforestation has deprived parrots of having any safe tall trees to live and birth thus, they have been getting extinct. (107)

    On the other hand, it has been proved that the quality of life will enhance when the growth of cities has considered the existing opportunities in inner cities. First of all, affordable houses and apartments covering a wide range of economic status could be facilitated. For instance, the renovation and reconstruction of the decade housing fabrics could resolve the matter of high-cost accommodation. Secondly, not only the price of housing would be moderated but also the level of accessibility towards any services and destinations could be boosted. For instance, instead of traveling for a long time and being stuck in traffic to arrive at work, citizens just could reach there on foot. (108)
    By the way of conclusion, preserving the countryside is vitally essential while the natural lands and farms could be preserved and the quality of citizens’ lives would enhance. (27)

  • Omiiid    Omiiid

    Growing big cities into suburbs has made a lot of problems.while i agree that building in countryside is the only sulotion inevitably,I believe in protection of countryside anyway.

    To begin with,while people are mushrooming in the cities of the largest developing countries they meet urgent need of space in order to settle down the population,and there is no way out of this dillema but engulfing countryside zone into the main city.as a result,this process,referred as urbanization,will change face of everything in a not pleasant manner which the area used to be.furthermore,at the present time,the world has encountered by enormous environmental contaminating pullotion of cities;which is remarkably increasing because of high speed irregular urbanization into rural areas.such interruptions in nature definitely will lead to ecological disruption.

    On the other hand,despite the fact that urbanization is a harmful phenomena environmentally,it would make some sensible improvements economically and culturally.moreover,it can provide greater opportunity for locals to gain high-paid jobs or establish their own business.for example many parts of the today modern Tehran were rural areas ti recent years.at last,by increasing rate of house building in countryside new towns and medern cities will be developed;which embedding fresh citizens with a forward looking of unprecedented prospects for future.

    In conclusion,however urbanization could be advantageous but it will be done by malignant interruptions in nature that I believe it should be prevented as much as possible.

  • Javadeb    Javadeb

    The demand for houses has increased rapidly these days due to the significant growth of the world population. Although some people believe building in the countryside is beneficial, others including me think protecting the countryside is essential. This essay will discuss the second viewpoint.
    Some people believe constructing buildings in the suburban area will increase pollution. First of all, building more houses in the countryside means bringing more cars. The higher the number of people living in an area, the higher demand for cars will be. And as most vehicles consume fossil fuel, they contribute to air pollution. Secondly, more people in a place leads to producing more waste and this can cause more diseases. Every house produces tons of waste yearly and this will pollute the area. This waste must be buried somewhere, and this waste has sewage effluent that can reach groundwaters. These groundwaters may be used in the agriculture and bring diseases for people.
    Building in the rural area would reduce the quality of life. First of all, because a lot of jobs and big stores are located in cities, people who live in suburban area have to spend a lot of time to get to the city. This can lead to tiredness and decreased efficacy of people at work. Secondly, some facilities and services may not be available in the countryside or be of low quality. For instance, entertainment facilities may lack variety and medical or transportation services may lack quality, and this can cause more illnesses or dissatisfaction among people.
    In conclusion, constructing more houses in the countryside has drawbacks both for people and the environment. This decision can increase pollution and decrease the quality of life for residents.
    (284 words)

  • Negar_Eb    Negar_Eb

    Writing Task 2
    Nowadays due to the growing population, there is not enough space to build houses in cities. Although some people think homes should be built in the countryside, others including me believe constructing houses harms the countryside. This essay will discuss the second viewpoint. (43 Words)
    Building new homes in the countryside will lead to the destruction of the environment. First of all, when people live in a place, they automatically produce waste. This trash not only pollutes the area, but also damages the wildlife. For example, people throw out large amounts of plastic waste which do not biodegrade. In addition, animals may eat trash by mistake and become ill or die. Secondly, in order to build houses and roads in rural places, many trees have to be cut down. Consequently, the natural habitat of the local animals will be destroyed and it also can lead to air pollution. (103 Words)
    Moving from cities to the countryside can be really costly. Firstly, people will have to spend large sums of money in order to go to the city. For instance, if somebody works in the city or has relatives there, they will have to pay a lot of money for transportation. Secondly, building a new society in suburban areas requires a lot of investment. A new town needs roads, schools, industries and entertainment facilities which cost money. This money has to be provided through increasing the taxes which many people may not agree to pay. Therefore, it is not financially worthwhile to build homes in the countryside. (106 Words)
    In conclusion, building houses in the countryside has some disadvantages such as harming the environment and costing a lot of money. (21 Words)

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    Demand for accommodation is accelerating with increasing population. Although some people believe that construction in suburb is beneficial, others including me believe that in order to protect the countryside construction should not be allowed. The second viewpoint will be discussed in this essay. (43)
    Construction in countryside will destroy the environment. First of all, logging will damage the environment. Forests are vital natural resources which are irreplaceable and we have to protect them for future generation. Trees are the essential source of living as they are producing the oxygen and help to regulate the temperature and pollution. Secondly, habitat destruction is one of the most crucial impacts of destroying the environment. It is undeniable that countryside is a shelter for plant and animals. Farming land will decrease because of soil erosion. Even various species of animals will lose their natural habitats. And they used to visit the cities at night and harmful to kids. (109)
    People who live in countryside will face transportation problem. First of all, new roadways have to be constructed by municipal corporations. they have to consume substantial money to build convenient roads and provide public transport system for these residents in outskirt It is difficult for them to make arrangement of water supply, electricity and drainage system in the outer region of the city. Secondly, many residents in suburb have to commute between city and countryside. Some of them commute for working and some others for shopping and maybe other duties. Urban development in suburb same as building mega malls will decrease the number of commuting. But due to working in big cities the transportation system is an essential need for the residents in suburb. (124)
    By way of conclusion, some people believe that construction in suburb is beneficial others have the opposite viewpoint and believe that in order to protect the countryside, construction should not be allowed. (30)

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    agree to protect countryside
    – destroy environment
    #logging
    #damage habitat
    -transportation problem
    # construction new road
    # commute between city and countryside

    • admin    admin

      این به نظر تکرار قبلی هست تفاوت زیادی ندیدم.

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    agree to protect countryside
    -destroy habitat
    #logging
    #pollution
    -transportation problem
    #construct new road
    #building mega mall to prevent of commute to big city

    • admin    admin

      مورد آخر رو متوجه نشدم.

  • Agree
    – To protect environment
    # Population causes pollution
    # Create spaces need logging
    -to avoid big cities problem
    # Transportation
    # Safety

    Disagree
    – Economic issue
    # reduce field’s cost
    # job opportunities will increase (growing city results in new demand)
    -Keep cities landscape beautiful
    # avoid constructing high building
    # enough green spaces in urban area

    • yekta golpazir

    • admin    admin

      در ایده پردازی دوم دو مورد مربوط به economic issues رو متوجه نشدم.

  • Mojgan    Mojgan

    درود بر استاد گرامی
    ممنون میشم برای آزمون ماک راهنمایی بفرمایید، به نظر شما چه زمانی مناسب هست که آزمون بدیم؟ چه مرکزی بهتر هست؟

    • admin    admin

      درود به شما

      با توجه به طولانی بودن موضوع در کلاس مطرح کن کامل بحث کنیم و توضیح بدم به همه بچه ها

  • Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am writing to raise your concern about the necessity of a training course that could be provided with reasonable price according to the advertisement that I have seen recently. This is an exceptional course related to a geographic information system which could expand our knowledge about managing and evaluating any data related to the earth.
    I was wondering if the company could assist us with booking this course in advance which it might be fully occupied while it would be well demanding for other competitor companies. Eventually, if there were any hesitations at this time, this would necessitate hiring the professional trainers being charged by the hour and their schedules may not be completely fitted with the deadline of submitting projects.
    This instruction would address the needs of urban planners that nowadays learning it has been widespread. According to the heavy tasks about a statistical and graphical analysis that we might be facing difficulty during accomplishing them, it has been supposed that this training course would be beneficial as the entire land assessments could be done through it.
    Your prompt effort to resolve this matter would be appreciated
    Faezeh
    Total 191

  • Mojgan    Mojgan

    Dear Sir or madam,
    I’m writing to inform you about a website design training course which I have seen on Sharif University web site. I think this course will be beneficial for me and our team. (32 words)
    This course is one day intensive training that called ‘User Experience practical workshop’, it is vital for every web sites and web applications. Also, it will be held on Thursday, 21th of June in Sharif University. In this training workshop, prominent speakers and mentors will train key points to improve web design. (52 words)
    Users experience is essential for all websites and paying attention to its tips, can make a good feel for users to navigate the web site. In our team, one missing knowledge is designing websites that users interact with it conveniently. In addition, some of clients claim that they cannot brows our designed website easily and they cannot find the target pages that are looking for it. (66 words)
    According to the conditions of this training, no one can register to this course personally and need to be introduced by the company. I really appreciate any help you can give me. Further and more important, I think it is precious training course and if it is possible, all our team members attend to this training course. (57 words)
    Your faithfully

    • admin    admin

      درود

      متاسفانه رایتینگ شما بالای 200 واژه هست و در آزمون رسمی نوشتن این رایتینگ ممکن نخواهد بود.

      برای دریافت فیدبک کوتاه کنید تا حدود 180 واژه و زیر همین نوشته کامنت کنید برای فیدبک.

      • Mojgan    Mojgan

        Dear Sir or Madam,
        I’m writing to inform you about a website design training course which I have seen on Sharif University web site. This course is one day intensive training that called ‘User Experience practical workshop’. It will be held on 21th of June in Sharif University. In this training workshop, prominent speakers and mentors will train key points to improve web design. (60 words)
        Users experience is essential for all websites and paying attention to its tips, can make a good feel for users to navigate the web site. In our team, one missing knowledge is designing websites witch users interact with it conveniently. In addition, some of clients claim that they cannot brows our designed website easily and find the target pages that are looking for it. (64 words)
        According to the conditions of this training, no one can register to this course personally and need to be introduced by the company. I really appreciate any help you can give me. Further and more important, I think it is precious course and if it is possible, all our team members attend to this event. (56 words) (total 180words)
        Your faithfully

  • Omiiid    Omiiid

    The table shows different sorts of job with different revenue for men and women at the same job on a weekly basis.
    As it has been shown,as it has been expected,professionals and experts had the best high incomewith 2000$ for men and1900$for women each week.technicians are in the second place by a minor discrepancy versus administrations and white color jobs;however the disparity in women was a bit intensified.
    And lowest incomes belonged to service workers and laborers with 1300$ and 1200$ per week respectively.female laborers are inferior to othersas a matter of fact.
    Overall,the table illustrated amount of money of various occupations which they had made in 2015.

    • admin    admin

      درود

      رایتینگ شما تنها 100 واژه هست. در آزمون نمره بسیار پایینی برای چنین رایتینگی دریافت خواهید کرد.

      رایتینگ های تسک 1 دست کم 150 واژه و تسک 2 دست کم 250 واژه باید باشند. دقت بفرمایید و بعد از آپدیت همینجا کامنت کنید برای فیدبک

    • The table shows different sorts of job with different revenue for men and women at the same job on a weekly basis.
      Obviously men made much more money than women in any of the jobs.
      As it has been shown,as it has been expected,professionals and experts had the best high income with 2000$ for men and1900$for women each week.its noteworthy to say that segregation is least in this case.technicians are in the second place by a minor discrepancy versus administrations and white color jobs;however the disparity in women was a bit intensified.
      And lowest incomes belonged to service workers and laborers with 1300$ and 1200$ per week respectively.female laborers are inferior to others as a matter of fact.
      Overall,the table illustrated amount of money of various occupations which they had made in 2015 by a weekly basis.

      • admin    admin

        رایتینگ ارسال شما زیز 150 واژه هست.

        برای دریافت فیدبک باید دست کم 150 واژه بنویسید.

        در آزمون رسمی رایتینگ های زیر 150 کلمه با کاهش نمره جریمه خواهند شد.

  • Javadeb    Javadeb

    This chart illustrates the amount of salary for men and women per week in various jobs in 2015.
    Professional men earned the highest salary and on average, they received 2000$ per week. After that it was male technicians with the highest income, who had a weekly salary of 1400$. Male service workers and male administrative/clerical workers earned slightly different salaries in 2015 which were about 1300$ and 1350$, respectively. Men who did manual labor jobs earned the least income – just a little over 1000$ – which was around half of the salary of professionals.
    On the other hand, women were paid less than men. However, professional females were also at the top of the pay scale with 19000$ per week. With a significant gap, females in the position of an administrative had the second-highest income with about 1000$. Furthermore, females got a little less than 1000$ for technical and service jobs. The lowest-paid women were those who did manual labor jobs with a weekly salary of 850$.
    Overall, there was a significant difference in the amount of money paid depending on gender and occupation. In all jobs, women’s overall income was were less than men’s.
    (195 words)

  • beheshteh    beheshteh

    Dear sir/madam
    I am writing with regard to a practical advertisement for an instruction course. It is a window of opportunity to access to the latest knowledge in field of marketing. (29)
    This course is the latest academic method that I really look to it. 4th of January is the first time which this course will hold on in our hometown. I am very keen on attending that course and I could cope with that. Moreover, I am in charge of marketing department in the company as well as it is an essential expertness for my duties. (65)
    As I have mentioned above, the education course will start on 4th of January and it lasts 3 days from 8 AM to 3 PM. I will not be at the office those days and I need to be allowed to participate in this course. Beside I hope the company to pay the fee for this course. (57)
    Taking part in this course is functional for my job. I will be able to get some extra qualifications. After passing this course I will be skilled more and I can handle my department better than before. Moreover I can share the obtained knowledge with my colleagues via teaching them all topics. (52)
    Yours faithfully

    • admin    admin

      • beheshteh    beheshteh

        سلام و خسته نباشيد
        استاد اصطلاح i could cope with that را از كتاب objective ielts صفحه 26 درس 4 ( recording script صفحه 152خط 13 ) استفاده كردم.
        به نظرم معني اش از عهده اين كار برآمدن بود لطفا راهنمايي فرماييد. با سپاس

      • beheshteh    beheshteh

        ببخشيد سوالم نصفه مانده بود ارسال شد
        i am very keen on attending براي نوشتن مناسب نيست؟ محاوره اي است درست متوجه شدم؟

  • A glance at the table provided reveals the average amount of money men and women earn per week in a range of occupations in 2015.
    The least difference between salaries of men and women and the highest salaries relate to professionals. Men’s receive $2000 weekly, while women make only $100 less than them. In contrast, there is a major difference between the amount of money which is made by men and women as a technician. Men’s average salary is $1400 and women earn only $900 weekly.
    The amount of money that is made by service workers and administrative/clerical workers is virtually equal. The average salary of woman is $950 as a service worker and $1000 as an administrative/clerical worker. The gender pay gap in these two occupations is exactly identical and men’s salary is $350 more than that women receive.
    Manual laborers receive the lowest salaries. The average salary is $1100 for men and $850 for women per week.
    Overall, the average amount of money that men make every week is more than that women earn in similar occupations. (179 words)

  • After correction
    FAEZEH MOHAMMADI- EVEN TIR
    WRITE RIGHT- IMMIGRATION

    The responsibilities and obligation of immigrants towards host countries to create social integration have been widely debated. Although some people think that newcomers could ignore the codes of behavior of adopted countries, other people including me have a contrary idea. In this essay, I will discuss the second point. (54)

    On the one hand, it has been proved that the primal stage of immigrants’ social integration is to prevent any social chaos. First of all, it is generally understood that all individuals, must respect the regulations of the state on whose territory they are present. For instance, drinking alcohol and gambling are kinds of strictly prohibited practices in some countries but they are permitted in other countries. Secondly, it would be argued that the contradictions and tension among migrants and host society would decrease through observing the laws and reciprocal respect will result. For instance, continuing the old driving rules regardless of any differences to the laws in their home country would end in the explosion of resentments. (118)

    On the other hand, it has been reaffirmed that social cohesion through observing social norms is essential to bind people into societies. First of all, although possessing different cultures and nations give countries color and vitality, it will undermine them by generating the sense of alienation among people, if there are not any legislation to unify this vibrancy. Secondly, it has been argued that the sense of similarity among people unite them whereas differences will result in isolation and division. For instance, it is probably easy for new societies to accept the migrants while they observe newcomers have the enthusiasm to participate in their national events. (106)
    By the way of conclusion, migrants to integrate into new societies should prevent any social chaos and respect the social norms. (21)
    Total: 299

    • admin    admin

      درود.

      پاراگراف اول تقریبا بدون خطا هست. البته جای استفاده واژگان و ساختارهای دستوری بهتر رو بدون شک داره.

      پاراگراف دوم از سوال فاصله گرفته و واضح توضیح داده نشده که کنار گذاشتن باورها و رفتارهای قدیمی چطور میتونه به فرایند جذب شدن در کشور جدید کمک کنه. کلا فاصله بیشتری از سوال گرفته.

  • FAEZEH MOHAMMADI- EVEN TIR
    WRITE RIGHT- IMMIGRATION

    The responsibilities and obligation of immigrants towards host countries to create social integration have been widely debated. Although some people think that newcomers do not need to respect the codes of behavior of adopted countries, other people including me have a contrary idea. In this essay, I will discuss the second point.

    On the one hand, it has been proved that the primal stage of immigrants’ social integration is to prevent any social chaos and disorder. First of all, it is generally understood that all individuals, must respect the laws and regulations of the State on whose territory they are present, regardless of any differences to the laws in their home country. For instance, drinking alcohol and gambling are kinds of strictly prohibited practices in some countries but they are permitted in other countries. Secondly, it would be argued that the contradictions and tension among migrants and host society would decrease through observing the laws and with this regard the possibility of misunderstanding will diminish and reciprocal respect will result.

    On the second hand, it has been reaffirmed that social cohesion through observing social norms is essential to bind people into societies. First of all, although possessing different cultures and nations give countries color and vitality, it will undermine them by generating the sense of alienation among people, if there are not any legislation to unify this vibrancy. Secondly, it has been argued that the sense of similarity among people unite them whereas differences will result in isolation and division. For instance, it is probably easy for new societies to accept the migrants while they observe newcomers have the enthusiasm to participate in their national events.
    By the way of conclusion, migrants to integrate into new societies should prevent any social chaos and respect the social norms.

  • Mojgan    Mojgan

    #to be accepted in new communities
    – to make new friends
    -have more chance to get job
    #To maintain social order
    -new laws may be different
    – realize new unwritten rules

    Immigration has increased dramatically in recent decades. Some people believe newcomers can fit in the host country without give up their traditional customs, others including me, have opposite viewpoint. This essay will discuss the second viewpoint. (37 words)
    For all immigrant, it is vital to be accepted in new communities. First of all, they need to make friends. Humans are social beings and everyone needs to be part of a community or group and this requirement is essential for every immigrant. They will not feel isolated by joining to various groups. Secondly, they
    have more chance to get job. By joining the groups, Immigrants can connect with other people who have that local culture and strong network of friends. Member of group can teach them social norms in friendly atmosphere and make great opportunities for immigrants to know about job offers and labor market. (106 words)
    Further and even more importantly, immigrants should observe the law to maintain social order. Firstly, the new country laws may be different from their home country. Regardless of what they had done before, they must respect accepted rules in host country to avoid problems and conflict with other people. Secondly, they must realize new unwritten rules. Despite the written rules there are a huge amount of unwritten rules in every country that knowing them can help immigrants to have better communication and life satisfaction. Newcomers learn all unwritten rules by paying attention to local people’s behavior and their body language. Thus by obeying the rules they can inhabit more convenient and help to maintain social cohesion. (116 words)
    In conclusion, immigrants will be accepted in new communities and will maintain social order, if they accept the new rules in new society. (23 words)

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