رایتینگ کتاب IELTS Write Right با جواب – سوال 11 تاثیر اینترنت

رایتینگ کتاب IELTS Write Right با جواب

رایتینگ کتاب IELTS Write Right با جواب – سوال 11 تاثیر اینترنت

در اینجا پرسش یازدهم رایتینگ کتاب IELTS Write Right بهمراه نمونه پاسخ هایی از زبان آموزان کلاس فشرده آیلتس روزهای زوج تیرماه مهندس ابوالقاسمی و برخی از عزیزانی که برای تعیین سطح راییتینگ نمونه هایی را در کانال تلگرام برای ما ارسال کردند آورده میشود.

در زیر همچنین میتوانید نمونه پاسخ الگو نوشته شده توسط نویسنده کتاب و واژگان پیشنهادی ایشان را در 3 سطح مختلف بازبینی فرمایید:

نمونه پاسخ ها

در اینجا نمونه پاسخ مهندس ابوالقاسمی آورده شده است. این پاسخ بر پایه ایده پردازی و نمودار حبابی کشیده شده در کلاس روزهای زوج تیرماه، شیوه تدریس و چک لیست نوشته شده است:

Few technological advances have altered modern life the way Internet has. Although the advantages are numerous and outstanding, there are some downsides to it as well. In this essay I will examine the issue and discuss the merits and demerits of this global network. (44 words)

Internet has offered many unparalleled advantages since the number of its users took off. First of all, it saves considerable time of each user. People used to spend big chunk of their lives doing repetitive tasks ranging from lining up for paying bills in bank to reading through thousands of pages in libraries in order to conduct a research. All that have been cut short by unbelievable speed and accessibility of the services offered online. Secondly, no one can deny that more than anything else, communication has been altered. It has enabled the citizens of modern world to contact each other from faraway places in many different ways as if distance can no longer pose a problem. (121 words)

On the other hand, however, there are some drawbacks that should not be overlooked. First of all, since the early days of the internet, it has never been a safe place and even the large multinational IT corporations with top experts have fallen victim of cyber criminals ever since. Secondly, simply the nature of using the net makes people less physically active and as a result more susceptible to obesity and a long array of health issues related to that. It is no secret that the youth do not show much enthusiasm to sports and outdoor activities which can easily be linked to the excitement and appeal of cyber space. (110 words)

In conclusion, while the substantial benefits that the Internet offers has made it inseparable part of modern world, the problems can not be ignored. (20 words)

(295 words)

نمونه رایتینگ های زبان آموزان

رایتینگ ارسالی از سحر – نمره 6 تا 6.5

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In your introduction you should limit yourself to 50 words or less and you repeated some of the ideas that could be avoided. the other point is that you don’t have a good opening sentence or hook. on the other hand at the end it’s better to have a thesis statement to say what you’re going to do in the rest of your essay

Although a higher level of vocabulary is attempted throughout the essay, sometimes the overall meaning is not clear and there are some inaccuracies in the word choice.

The other important point is that you do not start your paragraphs with a main idea and as a result of that you can not develop and progress in a meaningful way. You have to have a main idea at the beginning of your paragraph and then try to explain and persuade the reader.

You attempted to talk about the advantages and disadvantages of the Internet but you ended up talking a lot about just advantages and so little about the disadvantages you did not provide any support for what you said about the disadvantages and did not persuade your reader about it. It’s better to have two paragraphs each of them about 100 or 120 words and in each you present one or two main ideas and then in the rest of paragraph you talk about them and persuade reader what you’re saying is true.

In your conclusion you’re not allowed to talk about the points that you did not cover in the main paragraphs. unfortunately we can’t see something like this. Normally you have to have a review of your main ideas and probably a prediction or suggestion at the end to finish up.

Estimated Score for this sample is 6 to 6.5